User:Kwowd-music/Juice Wrld/GardenofG Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kwowd-music


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Kwowd-music/Juice Wrld - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Juice Wrld - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I want to start by saying I really liked the information you're adding to the article, I think it is important to add the reactions each individual artist had to his death, and I think you do an excellent job of relaying that information.

I would personally reword the first edit you made in order to make it more readable. For example, instead of saying, "This album gained him much recognition and praise, along with cementing him as a rising star in the US." Maybe say something along the lines of, "This album gave him much recognition and praise, cementing him as a rising star in the US."

Everything in your "reactions" section honestly looks extremely well written. However, another very small tweak I would make, try to make sure you're adding commas before the quotes for example, mourned his death by tweeting(insert comma here) "Wow, I cannot believe this. Rip my brother juice world". I would also say "stating" instead of "saying" before your quotes to make it sound more professional, but this suggestion is honestly just a preference.

I think you added some really interesting information to the "death" section of the article. The only change I would make, and once again this is another preference suggestion, instead of saying, "The County Cook Medical Examiner's Office first(insert initially here) determined the cause of death as unknown. However, on January 22, 2020, the Cook County Medical Examiner stated that Higgins died as a result of toxic levels of oxycodone and codeine present in his system." I would change first to initially to make it sound more professional.