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=Evaluating the Edited Article: Francis Stillman Barnard=

Evaluating Content:
The article gives a good overview of who Francis Stillman Barnard was. It is a short article, as there is limited information about this person. He held important titles but they were regional and due to the era of his life (1856-1936), detailed records were not well-kept. Still, the article does describe his upbringing, important roles and titles, and personal life. Before editing, the article had multiple grammar and syntax errors, as well as no headings or sections.

Evaluating Tone:
This article is non biased and straightforward. It is neutral as it does not describe him as a "good" or "bad" person, it is just a simple biography of his life and accomplishments.

Evaluating Sources:
There originally were only two sources: one being a short biography (that was copy and pasted into Wikipedia) and the other being a portrait. I was able to add in a couple more: two added sources were from a tombstone memorial site that described both Sir Barnard and Lady Barnard. That was important because not only did it confirm and add to the original source, it shed light on Lady Barnard who had previously been mentioned only by name, with no other details. Another added source was the newspaper clipping I included that conveyed the importance of Sir Barnard's knighting. There are several links embedded within the article to other Wikipedia pages, as well as red links implying that Wikipedia pages for those subjects do not exist yet. The external links work well.

Checking the Talk Page
This article is listed as a Start-Class, Mid-Importance WikiProject Biography on its talk page. It is part of the WikiProject Canada and is supported by the WikiProject British Columbia and WikiProject Political parties and politicians in Canada. When checking the "View History" page, one can see that several small edits have been done, such as fixing a template or updating dead links. These edits occur every year since 2007.

= Copyediting an Article =

Francis Stillman Barnard
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Francis_Stillman_Barnard

Stillman was born on May 16, 1856, in Toronto, Ontario. In 1860, he moved with his mother to Victoria, BC, where his father had preceded them by a year. There, he attended the Collegiate School in Victoria from 1866 to 1870 after which, he was then sent to Hellmuth College in London, Ontario, to continue his education. In 1873, he returned to British Columbia where he assisted his father in the operation of the family business, the B.C. Express Company (a.k.a. Barnard's Express). In 1880, he was appointed as manager of the company when his father's health turned for the worse. He continued in this position he continued until 1888, when he resigned to successfully run for the Cariboo seat in the House of Commons. Politically, he was a "liberal conservative", as Stillman was an ardent supporter of John A. Macdonald, with whom he campaigned and worked actively for the rapid settlement and development of the province.

In addition to his primary role in the B.X. Express, Barnard was president and majority shareholder of Victoria Transfer Co. Ltd. and its counterpart, the Vancouver Transfer Co. Ltd. He was director and secretary of the Vancouver Improvement Company, and also a director of the Hastings Sawmill Company, the British Columbia Milling and Mining Company, and of the Selkirk Mining and Smelting Company. He was also a Victoria city Councillor in 1886 and 1887. He was a member of the Union Club in Victoria, and of the Rideau Club in Ottawa.

From 1914 to 1919, he was the Lieutenant Governor of British Columbia. He was knighted in 1919.

In 1883 he married Martha Amelia Sophia Loewen, and in married life resided at Duval Cottage, Victoria.

There are several red links in the article, indicating that articles for those links don't exist yet. The external links do work.

Wikipedia Part A
Sir Francis Stillman Barnard was mentioned in a Vancouver newspaper clipping for making the British Honor List in 1918.

I believe this newspaper clipping enhances the importance of Sir Barnard's knighting, since the original article does not have much information on this historic and remarkable event in Sir Barnard's life.

Vancouver Daily World. (2017, August 28). Seven Canadians Named in New Year Honor List. Retrieved April 20, 2019, from https://www.newspapers.com/clip/13405671/f_s_barnard_knighting/

Clipped from Vancouver Daily World, Jan. 2, 1918

Part C-Wikipedia
"From 1914 to 1919, he was the Lieutenant Governor of British Columbia. He was knighted in 1919." I chose option B and was interested in his knighthood. This proved to be the correct date of knighthood, but more information was not found.

1.) Sir Francis Stillman Barnard. (2003, July 15). Retrieved April 3, 2019, from http://freemasonry.bcy.ca/biography/lieutenant-governors/barnard_f.html This source is a tertiary scholarly source because it comes from a short bibliography on the Free Mason website. This source is important because although it is short, it is from a reliable source.

2.) Francis Stillman Barnard (1856 - 1936). (2019, March 13). Retrieved April 3, 2019, from https://www.wikitree.com/wiki/Barnard-2272 This source is a tertiary scholarly source as well since it comes from a subsection of Wikipedia, known as Wikitree. It is an important source because Wikitree is a reliable page of genealogy records.

Part D-Wikipedia
I would like to know more about his wife, Martha Amelia Sophia Loewen, as well as continuing my search as to who knighted Sir Barnard in 1919. Martha was born in 1866, and her father was in the flour and distillery business. She died in 1942. Not much else is known except that she once entertained Prince Edward of Wales in 1919. One can conclude that it was Prince Edward who knighted Sir Barnard in 1919.

Search Terms: Martha Amelia Sophia Loewen, "Knighting 1919", "Barnard knighthood 1919"
 * https://www.findagrave.com/memorial/72506167/martha-amelia-sophia-barnard

This source is relevant because it gives lots of information about her and her family as well as a clue as to Sir Barnard's knighting. It is credible because the site was updated in 2011 and has links to memorial pages of her family members, as well as a photo of Lady Barnard's grave site.


 * https://eco.canadiana.ca/view/oocihm.15438/145?r=0&s=1

This source has less information about Lady Barnard but is still relevant because it mentions her father which confirms the first source's credibility. It is credible because it is an excerpt from the Biographical Dictionary of Well-Known British Colombians: With a Historical Sketch (1890).

Kerr, J. B. (1890). Biographical Dictionary of Well-Known British Colombians: With a Historical Sketch. Vancouver: Kerr & Begg. J. (2011, July 2). Lady Martha Amelia Sophia Loewen Barnard. Retrieved April 18, 2019, from https://www.findagrave.com/memorial/72506167/martha-amelia-sophia-barnard

From 1914 to 1919, he was the Lieutenant Governor of British Columbia. He was knighted in 1919 by Edward, Prince of Wales.

In 1883 he married Martha Amelia Sophia Loewen, (born 1866, died 1942) who's father was prominent in the flour & distillery business. In married life,Sir Barnard resided at Duval Cottage, Victoria.