User:Kyle.Eppert/Hawaiian Perwinkle/Kobikj Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User: Kyle.Eppert

Hawaiian Periwinkle


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Kyle.Eppert/Hawaiian_Perwinkle?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Kyle's page so far has a description of the species, where they are commonly found, what they eat, some anatomy, references are listed at the bottom of the page, and mentioned the defense mechanism that the species has when there's a predator. The information listed on the page is good, but I think instead of putting all the key aspects in one paragraph, maybe you could separate it so that way when the audience is looking over the page, the format will be laid out nicely and be well organized. Using the sub heading titles on the page also makes your format nice overall. I think grammar and spelling could also be double checked before finalizing and publishing your final page. In addition, I think you should also look for pictures of your species. That way your audience can have a visual perspective while reading the information about it. Pictures are always nice to look at instead of having just words.

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