User:Kymorgan/gap analysis

Gap analysis

 * What is the title of the article in which you identified a gap. If no article exists at all, what should the title be?

John Lennon


 * Document the gap you found, describe how you identified it, and analyze its impact on knowledge

For my gap analysis project I have decided to write a piece about Yoko Ono’s accomplishments to insert into John Lennon’s Wikipedia page. I noticed that when you log into John Lennon’s Wikipedia page it contains his biography along with his many accomplishments. When you got to the overview section, Yoko Ono is only mentioned once; listed under “personal relationships”. There is not a problem with this until you go to Yoko Ono’s Wikipedia page. John Lennon is mentioned in the first sentence of her biography. When you go to her overview section it looks like it could be as much about Lennon as it is about her. He is listed in many sections of her page and even has his own section. After seeing this I felt that it was necessary for his page to show some of the influence that she had on him and the world since her page seems to have no problem doing that for him. This gap exemplifies a form of HIStory, we are told about our past from the male’s perspective and timeline. By including Lennon so much in her biography it makes her accomplishments seem relevant because they were collaborated with Lennon. It strips Yoko Ono of her credibility as an artist when her biography is undermined by the chronology of her life according to her relationship. Since her page has so much reference to her husband I thought it would only be fitting to add a larger section about her into Lennon’s. Ono has made strides in the art world and deserves a substantial section explaining her endeavors with and without John Lennon.


 * Propose a paragraph of new or substantially edited content based on reliable sources. (If you are editing existing content, post the current version along with your edited version, and clearly mark which is which

CURRENT VERSION:

Two versions exist of how Lennon met Ono. According to the first, told by the Lennons, on 9 November 1966 Lennon went to the Indica Gallery in London, where Ono was preparing her conceptual art exhibit, and they were introduced by gall ery owner John Dunbar.[166] Lennon was intrigued by Ono's "Hammer A Nail": patrons hammered a nail into a wooden board, creating the art piece. Although the exhibition had not yet begun, Lennon wanted to hammer a nail into the clean board, but Ono stopped him. Dunbar asked her, "Don't you know who this is? He's a millionaire! He might buy it." Ono had supposedly not heard of the Beatles, but relented on condition that Lennon pay her five shillings, to which Lennon replied, "I'll give you an imaginary five shillings and hammer an imaginary nail in."[125] The second version, told by McCartney, is that in late 1965, Ono was in London compiling original musical scores for a book John Cage was working on, Notations, but McCartney declined to give her any of his own manuscripts for the book, suggesting that Lennon might oblige. When asked, Lennon gave Ono the original handwritten lyrics to "The Word".[167]

Ono began visiting and telephoning Lennon's home and, when his wife asked for an explanation, Lennon explained that Ono was only trying to obtain money for her "avant-garde bullshit".[168] In May 1968, while his wife was on holiday in Greece, Lennon invited Ono to visit. They spent the night recording what would become the Two Virgins album, after which, he said, they "made love at dawn."[169] When Lennon's wife returned home she found Ono wearing her bathrobe and drinking tea with Lennon who simply said, "Oh, hi."[170] Ono became pregnant in 1968 and miscarried a male child they named John Ono Lennon II on 21 November 1968,[137] a few weeks after Lennon's divorce from Cynthia was granted.[171]

During Lennon's last two years in the Beatles, he and Ono began public protests against the Vietnam War. They were married in Gibraltar on 20 March 1969,[172] and spent their honeymoon at the Hilton Amsterdam campaigning with a week-long Bed-In for Peace. They planned another Bed-In in the United States, but were denied entry,[173] so held one instead at the Queen Elizabeth Hotel in Montreal, where they recorded "Give Peace a Chance".[174] They often combined advocacy with performance art, as in their "Bagism", first introduced during a Vienna press conference. Lennon detailed this period in the Beatles song "The Ballad of John and Yoko".[175] Lennon changed his name by deed poll on 22 April 1969, adding "Ono" as a middle name. The brief ceremony took place on the roof of the Apple Corps building, made famous three months earlier by the Beatles' Let It Be rooftop concert. Although he used the name John Ono Lennon thereafter, official documents referred to him as John Winston Ono Lennon, since he was not permitted to revoke a name given at birth.[176] The couple settled at Tittenhurst Park at Sunninghill in Berkshire.[177] After Ono was injured in a car accident, Lennon arranged for a king-sized bed to be brought to the recording studio as he worked on the Beatles' last album, Abbey Road.[178] To escape the acrimony of the band's break-up, Ono suggested they move permanently to New York, which they did on 31 August 1971.

They first lived in The St. Regis Hotel on 5th Avenue, East 55th Street, then moved to a street-level flat at 105 Bank Street, Greenwich Village, on 16 October 1971. After a robbery, they relocated to the more secure Dakota at 1 West 72nd Street, in 1973.[179]

REVISED VERSION: insert this paragraph after the second one in the current article above

It is important to note the success of Yoko Ono’s career prior to John Lennon to emphasize their dynamic relationship. Yoko Ono had a flourishing career with John Lennon, but was a successful artist much before his presence. She was born into a wealthy family in Tokyo on February 18, 1933. They moved from Tokyo to the United States, specifically San Francisco for her father’s job, and back several times. Where ever she was living at the time she received the finest schooling and is bilingual. She has been formally trained in opera and piano since a very young age. Yoko Ono moved to New York in 1952 and attended Sarah Lawrence College for music and from there her career really took off. She erupted into the avant-garde art scene and was heavily inspired by Arnold Schoenberg, Anton Webern, and John cage. Ono became known for her conceptual art and performances. She held “happenings” at home that included music, poetry, and other performances. She liked to leave a lot of her art up to the interpretation of the viewer. For example, a lot of her art pieces were white so the viewer could imagine the color. In the mid-sixties she entered the art movement known as fluxus, which focuses on the interaction of the audience and abstraction. One of her most famous pieces derived from this—cut piece. She traveled to several locations performing cut piece. She had an exhibition at the Indica Gallery which is where John Lennon and Yoko Ono met, as previously stated above. They then embarked on a series of projects together. A lot of their work was not well received by fans of Lennon’s, Ono’s bold avant-garde style can be hard to grasp at times. They produced multiple albums and created various political movements together. The intricacy of Yoko Ono and her avant-garde style is what originally attracted John Lennon to her.

It is important to note the success of Yoko Ono’s career prior to John Lennon to emphasize their dynamic relationship. Yoko Ono had a flourishing career with John Lennon, but was a successful artist much before his presence. She was born into a wealthy family in Tokyo on February 18, 1933. They moved from Tokyo to the United States, specifically San Francisco for her father’s job, and back several times. Where ever she was living at the time she received the finest schooling and is bilingual. She has been formally trained in opera and piano since a very young age. Yoko Ono moved to New York in 1952 and attended Sarah Lawrence College for music and from there her career really took off. She erupted into the avant-garde art scene and was heavily inspired by Arnold Schoenberg, Anton Webern, and John cage. Ono became known for her conceptual art and performances. She held “happenings” at home that included music, poetry, and other performances. She liked to leave a lot of her art up to the interpretation of the viewer. For example, a lot of her art pieces were white so the viewer could imagine the color. In the mid-sixties she entered the art movement known as fluxus, which focuses on the interaction of the audience and abstraction. One of her most famous pieces derived from this—cut piece. She traveled to several locations performing cut piece. She had an exhibition at the Indica Gallery which is where John Lennon and Yoko Ono met, as previously stated above. They then embarked on a series of projects together. A lot of their work was not well received by fans of Lennon’s, Ono’s bold avant-garde style can be hard to grasp at times. They produced multiple albums and created various political movements together. The intricacy of Yoko Ono and her avant-garde style is what originally attracted John Lennon to her.


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 * "Yoko Ono." Wikipedia. Wikimedia Foundation. Web. 14 Feb. 2016. < https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Yoko_Ono >.
 * "Yoko Ono: TO THE LIGHT." Serpentine Galleries. Web. 15 Feb. 2016. < http://www.serpentinegalleries.org/exhibitions-events/yoko-ono-light
 * "Yoko Ono on ITunes." ITunes. Web. 15 Feb. 2016. .
 * "JPRI Occasional Paper No. 18." JPRI Occasional Paper No. 18. Web. 17 Feb. 2016. .
 * "Yoko Ono Receives a Lifetime Achievement Award in Dublin." IrishCentral. 2012. Web. 15 Feb. 2016. .
 * Munroe, Alexandra; Ono, Yoko; Hendricks, Jon; Altshuler, Bruce; Ross, David A.; Wenner, Jann S.; Concannon, Kevin C.; Tomii, Reiko; Sayle, Murray; Gomez, Edward M. (October 2000). Yes Yoko Ono. New York: Harry N. Abrams. ISBN 0-81094-587-8.