User:L06j02/Barcelona Tourism Pollution/Barcelonaspring2023 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Crwest11, Dxc256, L06j02, T5B582


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:L06j02/Barcelona_Tourism_Pollution?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
This is such an interesting topic, I enjoyed reading your article! I thought it was well written and a good review of Cruise Ship Pollution in the city of Barcelona.

Lead

The lead does a nice job of summarizing the article below and has a good starting sentence. I would suggest mentioning more specifics of what is talked about later on in the article. For example, referencing that there are economic and environmental impacts involved, etc. Additionally, there are some parts in the lead, such as the idea of "smart tourism" that are not referenced later in the article at all. I would suggest making sure these are necessary to include in the introduction or if it is additional info that may not be needed. Work on making sure the lead is more concise and does not include extra, unneeded information.

Content

There is enough content in the article and it relates to what the article focuses on. I don't think there is anything missing or anything that doesn't belong. One suggestion would be to add information/background on who the tourists are. Where do they come from? Age? Nationality?

Tone and Balance

The article is pretty neutral in my opinion. Potentially including more information about how Barcelona benefits from tourism now and in the past could be helpful to provide a more balanced perspective.

Sources and References

I could not do an accurate evaluation on this section because there are not many sources listed in the article. Make sure to have a source for everything that needs one. Also, the period source number should go outside of the period, not inside of it.

Organization

I did not find any major grammar or spelling errors. There are a few sentences that would be better split up into multiple sentences. I would suggest reading over it out loud and seeing if it reads well when said out loud.

Other Notes

- Consider referencing an article describing how tourism benefits the city of Barcelona in the introduction, will make it seem more "neutral"

- The introduction reads more so like a mini essay to me, I would suggest taking out phrases like "In conclusion."

- The article name is "Barcelona Tourism Pollution" but you are talking specifically about Cruise Ships, would it be helpful to change the name of the article so it can better represent what the article focuses on? (If you are adding onto an already created article ignore this)

- In the conclusion, it starts by saying "discuss the future prospects..." and this wording is different than the rest of the article. Is this sentence needed?

- Add in sources to the bibliography