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President Kennedy supported civil rights but was held back from introducing his bill, and King ran out of options. He looked to Birmingham, where African Americans lived segregated and in fear as second-class citizens.[edit]
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Malcolm X and Dr. Martin Luther King Jr. opposed the Birmingham Children's Crusade despite its nonviolent intentions. They feared that the participation of children in the peaceful protest against segregation would subject them to unnecessary violence and endanger their safety.[edit]

In response to the mass arrests of the children, Commissioner of Public Safety Bull Connor finally ordered police to use police dogs, high-pressure fire hoses, and batons and arrest these children if "deemed" necessary. Despite this harsh treatment, children still participated in the marches. On May 5th, protestors marched to the city jail where many young people were being held and continued practicing their tactics of nonviolent demonstrations. Jail cells were filled with children, and there were not enough police to manage the children.[edit]

On May 2nd, 1963, thousands of children gathered at Sixteenth Street Baptist Church in place of their parents, who, under Alabama law and social oppression, faced harsh penalties such as loss of their jobs and jail time if they protested the racist and unjust segregation laws of Alabama.

However, authorities adapted to his nonviolent approach. SCLC's James Bevel took drastic measures before Dr. King abandoned the Birmingham campaign because he was arrested for violating a state circuit injunction against protests. Dr. King and a majority of other African Americans got arrested for parading without a permit. Therefore, children became more involved in the marches even though Dr. King insisted that children stay out of the marches because of potential violence. However, during the march, the real South showed its ugly side, giving Dr. King and the Civil Rights Movement the jolt and leverage it needed to accomplish its ultimate goal.

Although the Civil Rights Movement had been active under Dr. Martin Luther King's leadership, little progress was made following the dramatic gains of 1960 and 1961. After some significant legal victories, the movement was beginning to stagnate. President Kennedy supported civil rights but was held back from introducing his bill, and King ran out of options. He looked to Birmingham, where African Americans lived segregated and in fear as second-class citizens. In January 1963, Dr. King arrived to organize nonviolent protests such as marches and sit-ins. The goal was to get a reaction from the racist officials that would not only spotlight the injustice of the South but also gain national attention and support. From May 2nd, all the way to May 10th, thousands of students marched the streets of Birmingham with the intent to fight against the racial injustice dealt against African Americans. Notably, the marches got the reaction they wanted from racist officials, causing people to sway away from the people in administration and pushing a significant amount of media that was broadcast to people all across the country to see just how bad these racist officials were, which led to many people supporting the movement. [ fact or opinion?] < Edit this to be more factual rather than an argumentive point>

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I found much-needed grammar fixes and sentence restructuring. There were a few ideas that needed further clarification and edits.