User:LBollefer/Doris Shadbolt/Cameron Kletke Peer Review


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LBollefer : Doris Shadbolt


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The Lead of Doris Shadbolt's page is short but concise, referencing her date of birth/death, and career/life. The Lead does include an introductory sentence that clearly describes the subject of the article; which is discussing Shadbolt's life and career. It is not overly detailed.

The content is extremely relevant to the topic of Shadbolt, and up to date as the information crosses her life up until her death in 2003.

There are some grammatical errors or additions I would make/change. The sentence " A passionate collector of B.C. ceramics..." could start with; "As a passionate collector of B.C. ceramics, etc.etc."

The second paragraph in the Career section of the article could be moved to be the bottom paragraph, as it references her life in 1975-2000, while the last paragraph talks about her life in the 1950s/1960s. I think that to create a more chronological review of her life, this would be the best way to go about it.

Additionally, a photograph of Doris Shadbolt would be a great incorporation to the page. I admire the Selected Works section of the article, that was a great addition, although some references to the selected works would be helpful to readers.

I've also noticed that there are no sentences that are linked to the citations- this will probably be included in the future. Some of the references also don't explicitly link to websites, but it is noted that most are books or printed works, which makes sense as to why there is no website link.

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