User:LBollefer/Doris Shadbolt/Taughey Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

LBollefer


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 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LBollefer/Doris_Shadbolt?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi Lois, this looks great! It's clearly written and organized, and you have a variety of reliable sources. I don't really have a lot to add in terms of many of the questions above. These are the points I thought of when reading through:


 * You could consider summarizing one or two of her key contributions in the lead to place her within the wider culture or community, e.g. her nonfiction art writing, groundbreaking work with Vancouver Art Gallery / for art in Vancouver, or awards she has won. I’m thinking of, for example, in the Jackson Pollock biography it says ‘...and a major figure in the abstract expressionist movement.’ Is there something similar that could help to summarize the rest of the article within the lead?
 * I’m curious about the 'Arts of the Raven' and 'Sculpture of the Inuit' exhibitions - is there info you could include on some of the key artists included in these (as with the New York 13 exhibition)? Are there any Indigenous voices on these exhibitions that could be included and cited?
 * Given her long-time role within the Vancouver Art Gallery, I wonder if there are any other sources with alternative viewpoints or additional information that aren't the VAG that you could include?

That's it! - Sarah Taughey (talk) 23:51, 18 March 2022 (UTC)

Thank you, Sarah,

These are excellent points I will incorporate!