User:LIL EDITOR 1/Teklife/Grrl89 Peer Review

Evaluate the drafted changes
Some general formatting notes:

I found it confusing to read about etymology before history, so I'd start with the history section and then incorporate the information about their name change (or keep that as a full section later on).

The death of DJ Rashad could be a separate sub heading. I personally would have Teklife Records as a separate header.

Grammar:

"a sped-up derivation Ghetto house which itself had been local flavour of house music." I think you're missing an a, "had been a local flavour of house music.

"As early as 2003, the group began releasing music as GhettoTeknicianz (shortened to GhettoTekz) with members identifying as Architeks, and only officially adopted the name Teklife in 2011 as some members of the group "feared losing opportunities from the word “Ghetto” in their name". I'd split this into 2 separate sentences for clarity.

"They bonded over music production with a particular focus on sampling on an MPC as much of the music they listened to at house parties was being released by Dance Mania Records, and whose artists (including Gant-Man) were particularly known for remixing popular tracks through a time-stretching technique of layering sampled vocals over a faster tempo averaging around 140 beat per minute, translating into what was the era's ghetto house movement." I'd split this into 2 separate sentences for clarity.

"Rashad and Spinn became involved with other members in the late 1990s and early 2000s at the Battlegroundz on 87th street in South Side, Chicago, where footwork dancers face off against one another to the beats produced and played by the duo." I'd use paste tense for face off

" Many members that later joined the collective like DJ Earl and DJ Taye ad been or continue to be dancers from the Battlegroundz. " missing h in had

"The spotlight shined on DJ Rashad whose debut album Double Cup (2013) was released on Kode9's London-based Hyperdub record label, and was met with critical appraise. " "the spotlight" comes off as a value judgement

"TEKLIFE Records was formed in July 2015, just a year after DJ Rashad's unexpected death left thousands in shock and mourning at the loss of a true innovator" this isn't neutral encyclopedia language (and not sourced)

References

- I don't think Metacritic counts as a source, you can use Exclaim or other music publications

- I'm not sure of Bandcamp as a source, I realize it's an article but I think it'd be better to source a music publication instead of a music distribution site.

- "as DJ Rashad recalls in an interview with Red Bull Music Academy in 2011, " - I think you could incorporate that as a source in the reference list instead of an outside link

- maybe its formatting issues, but some of your references are missing parts (like #7 doesn't say the publication, I need to click on the link to see it. #2, your academic citation - wikipedia says it needs to be reformatted with dates on my end).

Overall notes

Interesting article, I think you need to ad more citations to the article. Most of the history is uncited, or there are 2-3 citations for one sentence. I think you could spread those out, to back up more of the claims.

Is it possible to use a reference or a link to back up the members section?

The See Also section: I don't understand the link to The Era (dance crew), they're not mentioned in the article

That whole "see also" section I'd maybe remove as you cross link the words (ghetto tech, DJ Rashad) in the article itself