User:LIUOSU/Crystal Lake Cemetery/Schultry Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

LIUOSU


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Crystal Lake Cemetery - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Crystal Lake Cemetery - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Really good job! I think you did an excellent job in writing your article and it appears very professional. Great job as well with including as many sources as you did. I only have a few comments as to possible improvements. There are a couple of minor grammatical issues that I think could be polished. For example,

Memorial Day services have been offered by it (I would specify what "it" is) for about 60 years. The Corvallis American Legion Post 11 and the Corvallis Veterans of Foreign Wars Post 640 now sponsored (sponsor) the activity near the Civil War monument.

There are just a few issues like this, but I would just double check some of the grammar outside of that.

Your work on the history of the cemetery is excellent. Great job finding the history of not only the cemetery but early Corvallis! I really liked how you included notable people buried there as well.

If I was to improve or suggest one other thing is that you have information in the opening than you do in in the main article. I would double check to make sure that you mentioned everything in the opening in the article, such as talking about the American legion.