User:LIUOSU/Crystal Lake Cemetery/StaceySmithOSU Peer Review

Prof. Smith comments on first draft
Hi Yiran,

Here are my comments about how to improve the Wikipedia article.

Lead:

When you say that this cemetery is one of the oldest in continuous use, do you mean in Oregon? In Benton County? Specify.

I would move the information about Memorial Day services and the American Legion Post down to the "History" section. These are important facts, but they seem more secondary in importance and better to put later in the article.

Content:

When you say that the Alexander family "designated" the cemetery to the Masonic Lodge, what do you mean? Did they give it as a gift? Put it in their will to donate it after their deaths?

I would add a new subheading to separate out the second paragraph under "History" under a new title. This section would be better titled as "Historical Significance and Development" (or something like that).

Why did Benton County take over management in 2001?

It would be great to insert hyperlinks for all of the pioneers' names if they have Wikipedia articles. Do that by highlighting their names and then clicking on the chain icon at the top of the editing panel. Wikipedia will automatically bring up a Wikipedia page to link to if the person already has one. It is a good idea to also do this for all of the places that you mention in the article, such as Benton County, etc.

Style:

Proofread for grammar and polish before finishing the article. The main error I saw was that "imbedded" should be changed to "embedded." (spelling)

References:

The website http://www.uscemeteryproj2.com/oregon/benton/crystallake/crystallake.htm does not seem like a very reputable website to me with a reliable source base. I would really like for you to find a more credible source instead of this one.