User:LLonergan802/Burton Snowboards/SunshineANDSmile Peer Review

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LLongergan802
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 * User:LLonergan802/Burton Snowboards
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 * Burton Snowboards

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(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

When you mention "sustainability in snowboarding" could you give a few examples. Is it sustainability in the manufacturing or in the materials that they are using. Are the encouraging their consumers to also think about their carbon footprint while participating in this sport, or is this something the company is working on solely and internally.

I liked that you mentioned the partnership because it shows how the company is putting action behind their statements.

Is there more information about this 15 year plan and does it seem to be affective?

I think that part about their carbon neutral is very impactful and something that the audience should know and so I liked that you put that in there.

Maybe explain what the Scope 1, 2, and 3 emissions are just because not all readers might know that means.

How do they plan on reducing those emissions? Do they have a plan or is this a goal that set for themselves and they are still developing solutions?

I like the sources you used, and I also liked you drew information from multiply sources that allowed you to gain different perspectives. However, you could also try to find a source that counterargues a few of your claims that way your readers understands you really acknowledged all sides and are not being unconsciously bias.

The links to other sources are a great way for the reader to gain more knowledge and I think that really strengthens your contribution and the overall article itself.

If you wanted to include an image you could, maybe a picture of an advertisement that showcases their sustainability practices.

You might want to think about how the company and their production impacts the environment or how climate change impacts them. Are their material limited due to climate change? How are they responding to those impacts?

Overall I think your contributions are very thoughtful and will prove to be impactful information that is added to original article. There are just a few things you could more in depth about if you would like. For example, the emissions aspect is a very impactful source of information and I think it would not hurt to explain the different scopes and how a reduction in these different scopes of emissions can be very beneficial to the planet. This is a company that is doing a lot to help combat climate change and I think by explaining to the reader just how beneficial these changes are could make your contribution just that much stronger. But overall this was very well done!