User:Lady Halfwolf/Digital repatriation/Grannanj Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lady Halfwolf


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lady Halfwolf/Digital repatriation
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Digital repatriation

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead - The lead was not worked on in this draft, so there is no need to review it. However, it may be useful to see if the original Lead needs any additions based on what you added.

Content - You have added some really good information that the original article was missing. I think it really adds some pertinent information. I especially like the addition of the technology and how you went more in depth for the specific examples. According to the references you used, the information all seems pretty up-to-date, too. You may think about adding a little more to the "Intangible Heritage" section. Some quick examples might be nice.

Tone and Balance - The whole draft uses very neutral language. It is all very informative but does not try to persuade the reader from any one point of view.

Sources and References - You have a good amount of references for your draft. They are all pretty recent and come from reliable sources, such as journals, and seem to be from authors with a range of backgrounds. It is especially good that you have references from indigenous websites and authors. You also have all of your facts in the draft backed up by citations. Reference numbers 3 and 8 do not have links for them, though, and when I went to the link for number 7 it says the page does not exist.

Organization - The entire draft is very easy to read and well written. It is organized well and separated into sections that make sense for what they contain. I could not find very many grammar mistakes. The only one I found was in the third sentence in "Software and Technology" where something is missing, making the sentence incorrect. It might be the subject phrase at the beginning? It may have been nice to see your short addition for "Ethical Considerations" written with the actual section from the article so that I could see how and where it would fit.

Images and Media - You do not have any images or media. I do not think they are completely necessary in this case. But if you do feel like you want to, it may help to add images of the technology used or of some of the digital collections.

Overall Impressions - Overall you have written a very clear, concise draft for the article. It contains useful information that will help the original article. It is easy to read and follow. It may help to add a little more information within a few of the shorter sections, but overall the information you do have is good. Be sure to check on those links for the references so that they work.