User:Ladybug1900/Pepe Espaliú/JovialCarrot Peer Review

General info
Banner18, Gingersnaps264
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Danielbritain/Pepe espaliú
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Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the lead section could have a little bit more of the body information, like maybe some of his most famous works and where he was based out of (if applicable).

I think the headings for subsections are not formatted correctly.

The Early Life section is very detailed.

I love the artistic themes section. Maybe add some of it, especially that he had aids, to the lead.

Be sure to name the art type when describing works, since he does a lot.

This looks great! Definitely include the legacy of activism in the lead.

Peer Review Response
Thank you for the feedback! We appreciate your praise and suggested changes. It seems that our lead was too short and lacked some crucial information about Pepe Espaliú that we included in other parts of the article, and we plan to remedy that by adding additional information specifically about his AIDS diagnosis and his related performance art/activism to the lead. We also reviewed your suggestion to clarify the types of art when discussing his works: while we did originally mention the medium for each piece, some slight cleaning-up is in order to further clarify this information for readers.

--Banner18 (talk)

Thank you for the great suggestions! In response, we expanded the lead to emphasize key points about Espaliú's life, including his most important works and activism. This really helped us think about what is most important for a reader who may only skim the first few sentences of the article. The lead now feels much more representative of the article. Thank you!

Gingersnaps264 (talk) 00:52, 7 December 2023 (UTC)Gingersnaps264