User:Ladyoflorien75/Arthropods in film/Laura.griffin24 Peer Review

General info
Ladyoflorien75 and McKaylaOdum
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Ladyoflorien75/Arthropods in film
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 * Arthropods in film :

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:

The new written lead includes all the new content of the additional sections of the article. It gives a good introduction to the the article's topic and information added is relevant. My only suggestion for this section is not go into too much details of what Arthropods are because then you sort of drift off into focusing what the science of what they are and not exactly their contribution to films. You can keep it edited to what you have, but maybe consider doing it how the original article depicts it; shorter concise.

Content:

As for the body section of the draft, all the paragraphs are relevant to the topic and are also introduced in the lead. There were well written and have good supporting information and contain relatively recent sources.

Tone and Balance

The information provided is neutral and does not contain any bias. It stays completely on topic.

Sources:

All the sources are reliable secondary sources and pertain to the topic of the article. The oldest source is from 2005, but is is about a film from that time period. All links worked.

Organization:

Very well organized and precise.

Images and Media

The image included is relevant to the information provided to an extent. Maybe consider finding an image of one of the film posters to include if copyrights allow it.

Overall

The information that is to be added to the original article completes it. It provides more information to the overall topic. The part that could use some shortening would be the lead and discussing what arthropods are.