User:Lagg0515/Schizoaffective disorder/Dalia Arafat5221 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lagg0515


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lagg0515/Schizoaffective_disorder?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Schizoaffective disorder
 * Schizoaffective disorder

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think your lead section could use some more revisions. I would start the lead off with a definition of schizoaffective disorder. I feel like the first three sentences belong in the treatment section of the article. The lead should mostly just be an introduction to the topic and a brief summary of the major subtopics. It's good that you shortened the lead but I feel like you're focusing too much/giving too much information on specific subtopics. There are a few grammatical errors in your lead section. For example, the word "currently" is capitalized in the middle of a sentence. Also, the sentence "As a group, people with schizoaffective disorder that were diagnosed using DSM-IV and ICD-10 criteria (which have since been updated) have a better outcome, but have variable individual psychosocial functional outcomes compared to people with mood disorders, from worse to the same" should be broken up into two separate sentences. I'm not sure what your plans are for future additions, but any significant additions to significant topics should also be briefly summarized in the lead.