User:Lal2298/Spiral of silence/HaleyBolinsky Peer Review

General info
Lal2298
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Lal2298/Spiral of silence
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Spiral of silence

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? - There is not a lead at the beginning of your draft in order to establish what will be changed or added to the current Wikipedia page. This would be beneficial so that anyone who  views this can be able to identify what has been added or changed while reading what you wrote on your draft page rather than trying to decipher it.

Content


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? - If you are adding to the the current Wikipedia page, then your first paragraph just seems  like you summarized the introduction at the top with some of the information provided in the Background section.  To me it seems like you are either adding a new section or creating a new subsection underneath "The rising influence of the internet and social media."  The other content you have added is relevant and seems to give insight and elaborate on how the Spiral of Silence can be applied in the 21st century and how is has changed in the 21st century.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? - The sources that you have used to add to the current Wikipedia page are more recent and most of them are new sources to the page.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? - The first paragraph in your draft is not necessary to me because it seems like you just summarized information that was mentioned earlier on the page.

Tone and Balance


 * Is the content added neutral? - I believe the information you have added is neutral. You do a good job at speaking to facts and research and not diverting from the main topic.

Sources and References

Organization
 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? - The information you contributed is backed up great in each paragraph by your use of citations to inform the reader about where and who the information came from that you presented. By doing this it gives them access to see why the information you provided is reliable and useful.
 * Are the sources current? - Your sources are current as you have pulled information from sources from 2016-2019, which is beneficial due to the fact you are talking about how the spiral of science is being applied in the 21st century with social media which is more prevalent now then when it started in 1997.
 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? - The content is easy to read and follow, but it never hurts to go back and read what you have written aloud to help catch any errors there may be.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? - Here are some parts that I think need changes to them  - "While this study focused solely on politics being expressed on different platforms. It is noted that through their studies that they discovered that there are new forms to use the spiral of silence. Such as liking and sharing without any kind of comment or post expressing their views." ---> While this study focused solely on politics being expressed on different platforms, it is noted that through their studies they discovered there are new forms to use the spiral of silence, such as liking and sharing without any kind of comment or post expressing their views. I simply just deleted some words and added commas to change the structure and flow of what was written. -" It is also believed that in an online setting that one’s opinion is shared is a new way of a social cue being expressed." ---> In an online setting, by sharing on opinion you are expressing a social cue. I rephrased what you had written so that it could be understood better. -"This theory has become a greater in use now that online platforms offer more spaces to share opinions that many believe cannot be voiced." ---> This theory is being used more on online platforms by allowing people to share their opinions anonymously online without their identity being revealed. I changed the wording to where it could be better understood by readers. -"It was founded that users of social media when in the smaller majority they are less likely to share their opinions compared to those who are a part of the vast majority." ---> When users are apart of the minority, they are less likely to share their opinions compared to when they are apart of the majority. I changed the wording to where it could be better understood by readers. -"The way how silence is used now is not just seen as one's keeping an opinion to themselves but also seen as an expression of certain beliefs."---> The way silence is used now has allowed one to express not only their opinions, but beliefs as well. I rephrased what you had written so that it could be understood better.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? - The information is broken down into paragraphs and contains information that can be applied to the heading. Overall impressions
 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?/How can the content added be improved? - The information that has been added can contribute to the quality of the Wikipedia page, as it gives a 21st century application to a theory that was created in the 70's. It speaks more on how the spiral of silence can be applied to social media and how it is viewed on social media.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? - The strengths of the information added is that it gives new application to the spiral of silence theory. It allows it to be applied in a modern context and show how it has played a role in the change of social media.