User:Laleeibssa/Delmas Treason Trial/Gonzalez.selinav Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing: Laleeibssa
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Laleeibssa/Delmas Treason Trial

Lead evaluation
Selina ~ The lead section provides a brief and concise introduction of the topic.

"Just before the verdict, white supremacist spree killer Barend Strydom started to shoot people in the square outside the court. Eleven of those accused were found guilty; however, their sentences were overturned in 1989 after an appeal to the Supreme Court. " I think this sentence could be moved to a background section later in the article. It provides information about

specifics of the case but is something takes away from the short summary of the article.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

Content evaluation
Selina ~ The content so far is relevant to the topic. I like how you have structured your article in a way that clearly explains the parties involved in the trial

as well as their arguments and resulting verdict.

I think what is missing is


 * 1) Introductory paragraph; a section that explains the background of what incidents occurred that resulted in the trial. What are the goals that the UDF was pushing

and what their demands could have changed South Africa.

2. The afterwards; speaking about the effects of this verdict on the ADF and ANC.

3. Timeline; given that this trial was the longest trial in South African history it would be helpful to add a short timeline that summarizes the major events

that happen throughout it.

Tone and balance evaluation
Selina ~ The content so far is pretty impartial. You are doing a good job at sticking to reporting the facts of the trial. The tone of your writing

is also impartial.

Sources and references evaluation
Selina ~ I think as you develop your article further, you should rely on academic journals and other peer-reviewed articles. Since you are relying

on a newspaper article (from the NYT) to report on the specifics of the case and have maintained an unbiased tone I don't think there would be an issue.

But moving forward, especially talking about the political and social importance of this trial as it pertains to South African politics, yo should solely rely on

academic journals and peer-reviewed articles.

Organization evaluation
Selina ~ The content of your article so far is clear and well-written. I didn't catch any grammar mistakes or spelling errors. The sections that you have added

really make up for a clear and easy-to-follow article.

Images and media evaluation
Selina ~ Not applicable given that you haven't added any media.

New Article Evaluation
Selina ~ I believe you are drafting the article from scratch. I do think it meets the notability requirements. I searched some of the specific of the trial

on Google Scholar and I got multiple articles abut it. Therefore, as long as you add multiple reliable sources to back it up, you should be fine.

Overall impressions
Selina ~ I think you have chosen a great topic to work on. I'm sure you already planned the rest of the article but I added some suggestions above on what might be missing

from the current draft.