User:Lalis17/Parental leave in the United States/Stitch2001 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Lalis17)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lalis17/Parental_leave_in_the_United_States?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Parental leave in the United States

Evaluate the drafted changes
The changes made to the health section were interesting and well written. Based on the information from Dr. Rioux, it seems like the edits should be focused more on the last paragraph in the paternal leave section of the article:

"Research shows longer paternity leave increases the father's engagement with a child, which leads to the child's improved cognitive and mental health outcomes and fewer behavior problems. Studies have also found beneficial associations between paid paternal leave and mental health for first time parents."

I think it would be interesting and beneficial to add more information to this section regarding the impact of paternal leave on children. The edits you have in the health section regarding paternal leave might be able to be incorporated into this section instead. Overall, the edits you currently have are great and if you make any changes, I would love to see more information on the social or mental impacts of paternal leave on family members.