User:Lancelotsdaughter/Melania the Younger/StrawwberryShortcake Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lancelotsdaughter


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lancelotsdaughter/Melania_the_Younger?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Melania the Younger

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * The author did not edit the lead, only the main body of the article. The original lead of the article is sufficient.

Content


 * The content of the article is narrative based, more telling of the story of Melania. This is a great idea for supplementing information of Melania the Younger's life. There are references for new information added to the article. Great job
 * The content added is up to date and accurate from the bibliography. Rephrasing of a few sentences really helped out the flow and organization of the article too.
 * I would add some information about Melania the Younger's ascetic practices and how it relates back to her actions and behavior, like giving up property and funding of churches. This allows us to see her power and influence that she held with Christianity and asceticism.
 * The content is equitable and fair in this article

Tone and Balance


 * Tone is neutral and clear. The author is not trying to persuade the reader any which way.
 * Viewpoints make sense for the article content and topic. Links are present where other viewpoints or individuals are mentioned

Sources and References


 * Sources are preset where they need to be. References are done properly where new information is added. Nicely done.
 * Sources are current and I believe they cover all perspectives included with Melania the Younger.
 * Sources are done accurately. I think that a couple places in the article may need a reference, but I can't tell if this was added by you or not. Go through the article and see if there are any specific sentences that need citations or need to be removed.
 * Links work properly and are displayed where necessary

Organization


 * I'm sure you will do this when you publish the article and finish it, but just make sure the sections of the article are organized properly and your notes are removed.
 * No grammatical or spelling errors

Images and Media


 * There is one image on the original article of an artistic depiction of Melania the Younger. This may be an opportunity to add another if possible. If there are any images of specific churches/monasteries she funded, that may be an option too. It is up to you.

Existing Article

Overall


 * The readability of this article is the highlight. It tells the story of Melania the Younger's life in a narrative way that is easy to understand and digest. There could be more depth into her religious values and asceticism, but more depth into her life I don't think is necessary.
 * Connections could be made from her actions and behaviors to her asceticism. Link Christian asceticism somewhere in the article.
 * Make sure the organization of the article is structured properly
 * It was a little difficult to figure out what info was yours and what wasn't, but from what I could find, you did really well! Great job!