User:Landon Thomas 23/Tintic War/Sgs052901 Peer Review

General info
Landon Thomas 23
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Tintic War
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tintic War
 * Tintic War

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Lead is strong direct and clear. Minor grammar/stylistic suggestion would be to replace the word it with a more specific leading word for specificity in the first few sentences. The lead also points the reader to the notability of the article which is good. The lead is also concise and points the reader forward to the article. I think the last sentence of the lead could be rephrased for clarity and precision.

Content: Background information section is a bit unclear as to how the information is related; however, the content is very interesting and balanced. It adds useful information and the new sections also being added also add to this.

Tone and Balance: The article's tone is unbiased, balanced, clear and direct. The author keeps the reader from being led towards any positions.

Sources and References: The article has quite a few sources from scholarly, government, and media sources. They are a good variety and seem to be reliable. The sources are also current.

Organization: The article is well written and organized. It is easy to read without any noticeable grammatical mistakes. There are sentences that could benefit from more specificity and structure particularly in the beginning half of the article, however, it is a great start.

Images and Media: There are no images or media, but it could be added later.