User:Lanerino/Aqueous solution/Odowdall Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lanerino


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Aqueous solution
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Aqueous solution

Evaluate the drafted changes
This draft adds some much needed organization to the original article. The original feels almost like bullet points, except without any bullet points. Adding the sections helps provide a better classification of information to navigate through and just elevates the page altogether. The tone is passive, and the information from the original article is reorganized in a more intuitive way. More citations are added to this draft which is much needed, since the original article's citations are sparse.

All and all I think these edits help elevate the overall content and presentation of the article.