User:Langgggg/Akan art/Mkoch21Fox Peer Review

LEAD
 * Your lead is really strong, it gives a strong emphasis to what you're going to be talking about, and doesn't stray from that main topic -- the intro couple of sentences are a great introduction to the topic
 * I think that maybe a bit of a leading section about the sections that are within the article would be helpful to have in the intro -- then again, I know that it's difficult to add things like this when working with a group! So good work with what you have so far
 * CONTENT
 * Linguist staffs feels a little out of left field to me since it was so briefly mentioned in the aforementioned intro - maybe leading into it a little bit more and connecting it back to Akan art directly would be helpful, even just a couple sentences -- just something small to add!
 * TONE & BALANCE
 * I think the tone is really consistent throughout, neutral and not persuasive (like it should be) -- really great work here!
 * The content is super well written! I think that it has a clear voice, and it's easy to follow and understand -- and no spelling errors as far as I see! Great work to everybody involved.
 * SOURCES & REFERENCES
 * I like that you used books for your sources (or at least online pdfs for your sources) -- those are typically better sources and more reliable
 * The links work as far as I see.
 * ORGANIZATION
 * Again, I feel like there is a bit of a disconnect between linguist staffs and the rest of the article -- however, I think this is just a couple of sentences and keywords away from connecting.
 * OVERALL IMPRESSIONS
 * I think that this is going to be a great addition to the article you chose. I've always been fascinated by silver and gold smith work, and I find the lost wax process to be interesting as well. Is there more about that? It was briefly mentioned, but is there any more content about that? I think that may be interesting to delve into.
 * Maybe adding in a few sentences about linguist staffs and royalty to refer back to the second part of the first paragraph would be beneficial. Adding keywords and referring back to previous sections would be helpful to keep the reader on track! Still though, I know how disconnected the groups have all been recently, and my group and I have had the same issues. But for the future, I think this would be a helpful addition to keep readers interested and engaged.
 * Great work overall! I can't wait to see your progress on this one. :)

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Langgggg, ScoutB12, Emilyelizabeth19


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Langgggg/Akan_art?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Akan art

Evaluate the drafted changes
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