User:Lapoferr/Tesco/Accordian-Orangejuice Peer Review

General info
Lapoferr
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lapoferr/Tesco
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Tesco
 * Tesco

Evaluate the drafted changes
The origin does a good job of describing the how the company was founded and gives an explanation of their basic business strategy and philosophy. One thing I would consider adding would be slightly more detail concerning what they originally sold, rather than just saying a "market booth". Overall, good detail.

Expansion is a very important part of the company, especially when discussing environmental impact. It does highlight the general facts of their expansion, but it might be helpful to add some names of Tesco's acquisitions as well as where their production occurs, how they ship their products, etc.

The Environment section is very detailed and covers much of Tesco's business operations. It might be helpful to add some numbers to show their progress (how much money they donate, emissions figures, etc.), but overall, great job with your explanation.

Relating to the environment, it might help to connect the Diversification section back to the environment with a sentence or two. Sources are properly cited as well.

Overall, the article provides a complete analysis of Tesco and their operations. With a few additional specifics such as specifics, company names, and quotes, readers can get a very good understanding of the company. Some pictures might be good to add as well, but in terms of writing this is very well done.