User:Lariczan/Evaluate an Article

Which article are you evaluating?
Marsy's Law

Why you have chosen this article to evaluate?
I chose to evaluate the article on Marsy's Law because it is a law established in California that has had an impact on the rights of victims and incarcerated individuals since its introduction in 2008. The article should be evaluated because the article contains language that is not concise and biased. Therefore, the article does not echo the rights established and implications for victim rights. Yes, it is important to consider the effects it has had upon incarcerated individuals but it should be separate from the language of the law itself in the article.

Evaluate the article
After evaluating the article, the article contains a lead section containing minor errors of concision that do not describe clearly the topic of the article. The lead section contains explicit bias which diminishes the legitimacy of Marsy's law and the language of the proposition. Following the lead section, the article continues to contain biased language and criticism which would prevent a reader from accessing the information on Marsy's law as it pertains to victims' rights as outlined in the proposition. Therefore, the article represents a tone and balance that is unrepresentative of the language of victims' rights. If bias is to exist from the law, it should be a part of the sections on implications or criticisms but not belong to the explanation of Marsy's law. In the event the victim of a crime is to search for information, a reader would not be accessing clear or factual language on Marsy's law if the claims contained are not actually true. If claims are made they should be supported with clear citation therefore, a reader could make a distinction between viewpoint or factual source. As for the sources contained in the article, a few found were not reliable nor were they current. It is suggested that the sources cited be up-to-date if possible or cited properly in order for the information written to be properly reliable as accessing information. It is important to note that the language contained in the article should also be accessible to incarcerated individuals in the case they are affected by the implications of Marsy's law and how it has affected them as individuals who are subject to incarceration. I suggest further information be made available on statistics or data pertaining to the impact of Marsy's law on incarcerated individuals.