User:LatinaPrincess2003/Neighbors for Environmental Justice/Bloomsnooze Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@LatinaPrincess2003, @Linagebhardt, @Esmej626, @Pdouan2


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:LatinaPrincess2003/Neighbors for Environmental Justice
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

1st Section
I think the first paragraph is a great introduction to understand what N4EJ is and what they do. I do think there are some areas that had me confused. For instances, with the construction of a hot-mix asphalt plant. I don't know what that is and I think a lot of other people wouldn't know either, hence why I added a link to it.

With this sentence; "MAT Asphalt has continued its operations despite community protest  and debates over the plant's contribution to pollution and air quality violations." I am not sure if this is necessarily relevant to N4EJ. I get it is to gain background on MAT Asphalt, but I don't really see how this sentence is relevant in the overall overview of N4EJ.

With the last sentence; "Additionally, N4EJ collects environmental data and meets with local elected officials to discuss the prevention of future developments such as MAT Asphalt." I think this could go after the sentence of "N4EJ focuses its efforts on environmental justice....". I think it would flow better. but I don't think the ending is relevant; "such as MAT Asphalt."

Overall great use of citation.

2nd Section
I am unsure if the "[unknown]" part is placed there as a place holder or if that is a complete edit. If it is, I would just omit that entirely and just keep the rest of the paragraph. Overall good overview of CEJN

For SEA, I am unclear if the "environmental justice coalition" is separate or this is an alias to SEA. I think it would be good to clarify this in the wiki. I would also find some credible links for these sentences; "The SEA has a proposed mission..." & " An example would be the “Weed the Walk” ...."

For LVEJO, I think this section will work better if it had credible sources to back up this information

Overall I do like this history section, and felt like I knew generally what all of these sub groups did in terms of environmental justice.

Overall Evaluation
I think this page is doing great so far! There are somethings like I mentioned before like wording and finding credible sources. I do think it is important to also find some more information on what N4EJ has done collectively. I felt like I only received a smidge of info and I believe that if there were some more in depth information on what all of these groups have done together, it will make the Wikipedia page a lot stronger. Overall, I see great progress! Good job guys!

Evaluate the drafted changes
Edits:


 * change "Southwest side" to "Southwest Side"
 * linked, "asphalt plant"
 * linked "the little village environmental justice organization (lvejo)"
 * change "sides" to "Sides"
 * linked "industrial corridors"
 * linked "pollution"
 * change "weed the walk" to "Weed the Walk"
 * change " An example would be the “Weed the Walk” event in which volunteers walk around learning about plants and animals but also learning to take out weeds safely and not damage the plants while doing it." to "An example would be the “Weed the Walk” event in which volunteers walk around learning about plants, animals, and how to take out weeds safely without damaging them.
 * linked "altgeld gardens"
 * linked "toxic waste"
 * linked "after school matters"
 * changed "After school matters" to "After School Matters"
 * linked "little village".