User:Launchermap123/OLES2129

I looked up the very first edit on Taylor Swift's Wikipedia page, which summarized her basic personal information and mentioned her being signed to Big Machine records. If i had created the article first, i would've given an extensive overview of her childhood and personal life, including things like her parents and siblings name. and her history with music as a child. I would then transition into a paragraph on her rise to stardom at a young age, including information about her being signed to Big Machine Records in 2006, and the release of Tim McGraw. Whilst at the time her page was created she had yet to win any awards, if i were to create the page now i would include all her singles and albums, aswell as list the numerous awards she has won, and the scandals she has experienced.

If i were the second reader, I wouldve changed the format and sentence structure of this first author.