User:Laura.griffin24/Pleistoannelida/Rehema.karanja Peer Review

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https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/users/Laura.griffin24
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https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/users/Gadsuy56

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Laura.griffin24/Pleistoannelida:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Pleistoannelida

Evaluate the drafted changes
General:

- Add more pictures (there was only one picture when you needed three total)

- Tone is good, very professional and straight forward

- Article is unbiased and well balanced source-wise

- Article has many recent sources

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Introduction Section:

- The introduction section is a little too detailed. This section should just have basic, introductory information on things like what a Pleistoannelida is, what they look like, etc. Basic stuff like: they are worms, they are marine, etc

- Move a lot of the information in this section to the phylogeny section (I explain later ➡️)

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Morphological Studies:

- Don't describe the studies, just tell us the results

- Like don't say "Besides the eyes, it has also been studied that commissures in the brain, glanglia and nuchal organs were to have also evolved in the lineage of Pleistonannelida (Errantia and Sedentaria) by observing Magelona mirabilis"... Just say that 'Pleistonannelida have a brain, ganglion, and nuchal organs". Maybe describe what those organs are specifically for the reader.

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Phylogeny section:

- You don't need to list all the clades and orders of Pleistoannelida here because they are already listed in the right sidebar (on the official page)

- ➡️ You should retitle this section 'Phylogeny and History' and list all the stuff (about the Cambrian expansion and basal groups, etc) from the introduction here

- This section should also have a subcategory called "Historical Research" or something where you describe the history of scientific discoveries in this field (like the part where you say "There's been a lack of recently discovered annelid traits")