User:Lauralim13/Cultural identity/MRayCall Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lauralim13


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lauralim13/Cultural_identity?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lauralim13/Cultural_identity?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Overall, this was a great description of the evaluation as well as the detailed explanation on the aspect of education in regards to cultural identity. The emphasis on the cultural differences that students share in the classroom was excellent as it also is important. The reason being is that it decreases the chances of children taking on an individualistic mindset and subconsciously viewing the world as if their peers are all the same as them. Furthermore, it encourages curiosity and the drive to want continue learning and expanding their minds to do as stated, "challenge new information" or even old ways of thinking. On another note, the section is also void of bias and has a mostly neutral tone as it is careful to establish a tone that is able to "connect the dots" rather than try to persuade the reader to view the emphasis of education on cultural identity in one way or another.