User:Lauren.young1529/Kitchen (novel)/Zrbelleisle Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lauren.young1529


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lauren.young1529/Kitchen_%28novel%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Article

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

No changes have been made to the sandbox yet so I will review the article for now.


 * 1) The article does a good job introducing the information of the article in the lead, however there is information within the lead that is not in the rest of the article.
 * 2) The reviews by several companies is mentioned, but they are not discussed later in the article. These can be added in to fix this.
 * 3) The lead mentions two movies being made based on the novel, but these are not discussed at all afterwards. This should be added into the article.
 * 4) The characters section does a great job on introducing the characters.
 * 5) I think that it was a great idea to include the book information as well as awards that the novel has one. It gives a great way for readers to find more information on the novel.
 * 6) The article only uses one source. Adding more sources would be very helpful to the article, both in expanding the information given as well as ensuring it's validity.
 * 7) For the third award, it is stated "(this prize awarded for Kitchen and two other of Yoshimoto's novellas, Utakata/Sanctuary)". This should be changed to (this prize was awarded for Kitchen as well as two other novellas by Yoshimoto: Utakata and Sanctuary).