User:LaurenLainez/Overview of 21st-century propaganda/Tdinello Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

LaurenLainez


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LaurenLainez/Overview_of_21st-century_propaganda?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Overview of 21st-century propaganda

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead- Could be a little stronger. There is a lot of really good information in the following paragraphs, but the beginning doesn’t provide much context to what exactly you are going to be talking about. Being concise is important, but just a little more information would really help the reader.

Content- The information you added is very relevant. There was a lot of detail added, and it really helps enhance the original article. I am sure you guys know this, but there are a lot of very short paragraphs in the original article. If you add more information to those, it will make the whole thing a lot stronger. I really liked how in the paragraphs you added, you discussed the past and also brought in information from today and kept it relevant.

Tone and Balence- You remained in a consistent tone throughout, and remained very neutral. I really like how the article doesn’t just begin with talking about the United States, and discusses a lot of other countries with very different political views. The United States section isn’t very detailed yet, so when adding to that remember to keep being as neutral as possible.

Sources and References- Out of the links I clicked on, all of them worked and seemed like pretty reliable sources.

Organization- The entire article is very organized and there is a very clear format. I think with the more information you add to it however, it may be helpful to add subheadings into your sections. Your sections are already kind of organized in a way that it would be really easy to just add some subheadings to help guide the reader on what exactly they are reading.

Overall Impressions- What you’ve added so far is really improving upon the original article. You went into a lot of detail and shared some very good information. Making sure all of your sections are even and have the same amount of information and also just adding some subheadings would be the only two things I’d say would improve what you’re doing. If you make the other sections as detailed as the two you’ve written so far, you will end up with a very strong article.

Response
Thanks for the tips, we will make sure to improve the lead, add subheadings/headings and add detail to a few sections!