User:LaurenM247/Mshatta Facade/Maclainemary Peer Review

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 * Whose work are you reviewing?

LaurenM247


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Mshatta Facade


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mshatta Facade

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead sets the reader up nicely for the rest of the article. I would make minor changes such as breaking up the first sentence for it to flow better. Also, maybe replace “in situ” with something easier to understand? Personal preference maybe.

The contents of the article is organized clearly. I am confused about the “See also” section, which just takes me to a hyperlink of Islamic architecture. Is there a better place to reference this wiki page so that you could delete this unnecessary section? You could hyperlink it under the Greco-Roman and Sasanian Influence subsection in the first sentence “…like much early Islamic art…”

The history section is clear and developed. After seeing the article beforehand, your choice to add a large section on decoration makes perfect sense. It also ties well with the last sentence of the History section.

Under “Description” – Your sentence after the third footnote needs to be edited because you say right twice: “while each section on the right side of the portal is decorated with various animal and human figural designs, the right side is completely composed of vegetal and other non-figural motifs.”

Greco-Roman and Sasanian Influence is a really clear and informative section. Your hyperlinks are great and your sentences are rich. In the second paragraph, you could clarify which scholar said the theory that Al-Walid II intentionally commissioned imagery from Syria if relevant. You do a great job synthesizing the scholarly conversation on the iconography of the façade.

A note - You site the same source twice, so be sure to delete one of those (It’s the 3rd and 5th sources).

Lauren, you have used reliable sources to conduct an informative rendering of the decoration of the Mshatta Façade. I cannot wait to hyperlink this in my own article!