User:LaurenM247/Mshatta Facade/Vsmithmartin Peer Review

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User:LaurenM247


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 * Mshatta Facade

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Hey Lauren! Your contributions are very well organized. You seem to know the decorative designs of the facade very well and know its importance and greater influence. I really enjoyed this specific part of your page: "The facade frieze is bisected by a zigzag line of acanthus leaves that creates a series of alternating upright and inverted triangles. Each triangle contains a unique design scheme organized around a central rosette rimmed with acanthus leaves."

The way you write is both enjoyable and informative.

I only have a few suggestions that you may want to apply to your article. The first being to add a closing statement for your first main paragraph under decoration. It currently ends with the difference between the two facades, and I thought you could add some more information on the decorative features. Other than that, I thought your first paragraph was great. Under the influence section, I thought you could article clearer which part of the facades you are describing. In your page you say “one section of the facade,” when analyzing the images and I think you could be more specific. Another portion I think you can elaborate on is when you talk about the Sasanian influence. I want to know more about why the appearance of a Zoroastrian mythical creature suggests that visual culture came from this specific empire.

Overall, you have a great page. I think the most important thing you can do to improve your page from here is to go back and reread your writing. There are a few sentences that could be reworded for clarity. I read through some of your sources and they all look fairly current and they are scholarly. Reading your contributions really helped me with my article and how I should organize my information. I really enjoyed your section on the different theories of the incentives for the Caliph’s use of multicultural imagery.