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Evaluation of The Hate You Give

''Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?''

- Yes, everything is relevant to the topic

''Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?''

- There doesn't seem to be much on the section of the movie, this is a little outdated.

What else could be improved?

- The wording on the plot a little confusing, I would change some sentence structure.

''Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?''

- It seems like there isn't a lot on the controversy.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

- Like above, not much on the controversial side.

''Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?''

- The links I checked are relevant and work

''Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?''

- Most of the sources are from different journal articles that seem to be reliable, but there is also a mix of both polar biases seen in news articles painting gun control as either a positive or negative focus.

What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?

- Most of the talk is discussing what to add mostly in terms of the author.

''How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?''

- Rated as a "good article" not featured but fulfills all of the requirements, and it's in a wiki project.

How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

- No, there is no difference, but maybe a little bit less of an emphasis on the controversy.

Fifty Shades of Grey Evaluation

''Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?''

- Yes, everything is relevant to the topic

''Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?''

- Nothing seems to be out of date.

What else could be improved?

- There are a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes

''Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?''

- The controversial section seems to be free of any bias.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

- Not a lot of positive reviews on the novel, most are negative.

''Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?''

- The links I checked are relevant and function properly

''Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?''

- The links that I checked came from popular journals and magazines.

What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?

- Talk about the underrepresentation of positive reviews of the novel.

''How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?''

- Not rated, but is featured on notable "mid/ high importance" wikiprojsects

How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

- We haven't talked about it in class very much, but there doesn't seem to be a reason to have this novel in school libraries because other than a romance novel there isn't much to learn from a literary standpoint like other controversial novels.

Evaluation of Drama

Summary focus:

Who's Greg, character description. What happens after the kiss? She's already been in the stage crew for a while. "Allows Callie to recognize their talent" better phrasing would be nice. The first time for the book store they walked past the baseball field, going to the book store (better phrasing). Needs to have background (i.e. Matt and greg are related?) on the characters/ where's LIZ?! Missing Bonnie as well...she's important. Key plot points need to be more descriptive and supplementary points can be less so. Adding the audiences support after Jesse goes on stage for Bonnie. Last paragraph could use a little more focus on Callie and less of a focus on the boys.

The exposition: More about Callie and Gregs relationship, and more description on the characters and their background.

Rising action: Becoming friends with Jesse and Justin, Justin coming out, Callie developing crush on Jesse

Climax: The play itself, Jesse stepping in for Bonnie and the drama around her

Falling action: The dance and Jesse and Callie having a fight, and Greg making a move.

Resolution: Her reconciliation with Jesse and Liz, and her finding out about Matt having a crush on her.

Structure Review Comparison on Wrinkle in Time (Movie) Wiki Page

- At first glance, contains all of the main points suggested, without a summary section at the bottom, but I think thats ok because there is a summary at the top before the contents.

- I think the plot would benefit from an addition to some things we observe, like seeing Meg struggle to find balance with the Happy Medium. This would make the plot a little more full instead of the bare bones of the movie. This may be personal preference though.

- A nitpicky change, would be more variation in sentence structure, this seems slightly repetitive.

- The plot missed a large part of the movie, being that there are "warriors" all around the world that are fighting the |T. This page also doesn't include the doubt that everyone constantly had in Meg, in fact Meg was more of a stowaway with Charles Wallace and the Mrs. originally only wanted him. This plot point is missing all of the issues the Meg had with herself and how that changed throughout the book, this is a huge point to the movie.

- Aside from the missing plot point, each section seems to answer each question posed by the handout for wiki movie pages.

- Biased "Critical Response" section, very negative tone overall and missing some valid positive reviews for the movie...I would use this source to help flush out some more positive ideas about the movie.

"With Go-For-Broke Exuberance, 'A Wrinkle In Time' Celebrates The Power Of Love." Fresh Air, 9 Mar. 2018. Literature Resource Center, http://link.galegroup.com.proxy.library.georgetown.edu/apps/doc/A530684477/LitRC?u=wash43584&sid=LitRC&xid=0d8fff81. Accessed 20 Feb. 2019.

EVALUATION OF Mexican American Studies Department Programs, Tucson Unified School District:

''Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?''

- Yes, everything is relevant to the topic

''Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?''

- Nothing seems to be out of date.

What else could be improved?

- There are a lot of grammar and spelling mistakes

''Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?''

- The article seems to avoid bias, but has slightly rudimentary sentence structure.

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

- Doesn't really show the viewpoint of the politicians

''Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?''

- The links I checked are relevant and function properly

''Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?''

- The links that I checked came from popular journals and magazines.

What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?

- Talk about how to improve the quality of some of the sections

''How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?''

- Rates as a quality article

How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

- This article doesn't seem to show the complex ideas going on behind the scenes or even what the controversy is. The article simplifies the ideas of both the curriculum and politicians.

Evaluation of "Persepolis (comics)"

''Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you?''

- Yes, everything is relevant to the topic

''Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added?''

- Nothing seems to be out of date.

What else could be improved?

- The background section needs improving, doesn't match what should be under the background, but rather something that should be under the summary section. There are also different places for the other sentences on the page. Sources.

- They contradict themselves on the genre, this could be improved by clarifying the controversy surrounding what genre this book falls under.

- Start the genre/style section with a disclaimer: There has been a lot of discrepancy over where to place the novel under a genre because this book doesn't fit nicely into one category. (citing o'malley)

''Is the article neutral? Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?''

- The article seems to avoid bias, but some unintentional biases in the reception and analysis

Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?

- Doesn't really talk about the juxtaposition between the west and east.

''Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article?''

- The links I checked are relevant and function properly

''Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted?''

- The links that I checked came from journal articles, but some not so reliable cites.

What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic?

- Talk about how to improve the analysis of the genre and the controversy because they saw what I did in that there are some unrepresented topics and viewpoints.

''How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects?''

- B-class status, start-class on a quality scale

How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

- This article doesn't seem to show the complex ideas going on behind the scenes or even what the controversy is. The article needs citations and constancy.

IMPROVING/ EDITING "DRAMA (GRAPHIC NOVEL)"

BACKGROUND

The graphic novel itself combines both manga and comic forms, which the author frequently read while growing up. '''Telgemeier has since continued to write graphic novels depicting a similar growing up theme in her three recent novels of Sisters, Guts, and Ghosts. (5)'''

SUMMARY

Drama's main character, Callie Marin, is a seventh-grader at Eucalyptus Middle School. In the fist scene she is walking home with her friends Greg and Matt where she confesses her feelings for Greg, one of her best friends, and they share a kiss. '''Greg responds poorly because he had just recently broke up with his girlfriend. This effectively leads to tensions between the two, leaving Callie heartbroken'''. In school, Callie joins the stage crew for the production of Moon over Mississippi as the set designer, and is excited to implement her plans for the set. She has visions to make a cannon that explodes, although there are doubts from her peers about its feasibility. Later on, while hanging up posters for the musical, Callie meets twins Justin and Jesse. Justin is eager to try out for the musical but Jesse is too shy.

The next day, Callie goes to the mall with Jesse and Justin, where she shows them a book about set designs and describes her love for theatre production and her dreams for the future. As they wait for the twins' father to pick them up, Jesse and Justin sing one of the songs from the musical, which allows Callie to recognize their talent. After Jesse rejects Callie’s suggestion for him to audition for the musical, he accepts her follow-up offer to work on stage crew with her. At school the day after, Callie’s friend Matt, a lighting crew member for the musical and Greg's brother, angrily confronts her, and she is confused over his sudden aggression. She then proceeds to sit with Justin during lunch, where he shares that he is gay, and although Callie is shocked, she supports him nonetheless.

Callie and Jesse then watch the auditions for Moon Over Mississippi, where the lead role is granted to West Redding, which disappoints Justin. Callie confesses her crush on Jesse to Liz, who suggests that she invite him to the upcoming school dance. The next day, Callies goes to the bookstore with the twins and asks if their father knows that Justin is gay, to which Justin responds no. The next day, to counteract the lack of ticket sales, Callie decides to demonstrate her cannon in front of the student body, which generates excitement and an increase in tickets.

The first two nights of the musical were a success, but the third night was marred after West breaks up with Bonnie, the other lead cast member. She then locks herself in a supply closet and refuses to come out, forcing the stage crew to frantically find Jesse as a backup. He performs well and even shares a kiss with West like the role calls for. Following his performance, Jesse asks Callie to the dance but ditches her there to talk alone with West outside. Callie and Jesse then have a disagreement, during which Jesse implies that he is gay and makes a comment about how Callie falls for every nice guy. She storms off and coincidentally runs into Greg, an upperclassmen baseball superstar who she used to have a crush on, and they go for a walk, so she can clear her mind. During the walk, Greg tries to kiss Callie, but she refuses since she was hurt by him the last time they kissed. Later, Callie meets with Jesse where he apologizes and thanks her for helping him break out of his shell. Matt, the lighting crew member, then confesses his crush on Callie which he admits made him lash out at her during musical rehearsal. At the end of the novel, the stage crew celebrates the success of the musical and Callie is named stage crew manager for the following year, much to her excitement.

Genre and Style

The graphic novel genre of Drama is also praised by college librarian Eti Berland, who contends that the use of graphics allow readers to imagine themselves in the book. By having a visual representation of the challenges with which the characters deal, readers not only develop an improved understanding of LGBTQ experiences but also gain a better sense of empathy for others. For readers who identify as LGBTQ, Berland argues that Telgemeier's positive depiction of LGBTQ characters in Drama serves to validate their experiences.

Add "Controversy" to "Reception and Awards" and simply make it "Reception"

Between 2012 and 2013, Drama received many positive remarks from various sources. Publishers Weekly stated that Drama "sweetly captur[es]" the challenges that are associated with a middle school production. Booklist Review claimed that "Telgemeier is prodigiously talented at telling cheerful stories with realistic portrayals of middle-school characters." Ada Calhoun of the NY Times Book Review commented, "Telgemeier's use of color, created with design team Gurihiru, is eloquent."

'''There is also high praise from THE GAZETTE to Telgemeier for using the graphic novel style to present a more mature theme. (5) According to THE GAZETTE, Telgemeier does a wonderful job of being able to convey a theme usually meant for Young Adult readers, making it more accessible to the middle school audience the novel was written for. (5) From the School Library Journal, there is discussion about how this graphic novel promotes a more positive view point when compared to other novels; however, this is not to say that Drama is without its prejudices (1). The article by Abate, suggests that in attempting to make her novel more inclusive, Telgemeier inadvertently fits her characters into stereotypes. This works directly against the perceived climax of her novel when Jesse fills in for Bonnie and kisses West on stage. (Abate-7)'''

'''There is, however, some push back amongst libraries under the guise of not wanting to include graphic novels (3). Charles Brownstein, the director of the Comic Book Legal Defense Fund, does not agree with this genre loosing legitimacy due to the inclusion of images. Additionally, Brownstein continues to say(ON DRAMA AND OTHER NOVELS) "comics are clearly a vital aspect of current culture", and that controversy amongst graphic novels with relevant topics of discussion is expected. (3)'''

Both Publisher's Weekly and the Washington Post claim Drama to be one of the Best Books of 2012.

Common Sense Media acknowledges that "some readers may be uncomfortable with the graphic novel's depiction of homosexual crushes between young teens." '''Since this is a common point of contention, many schools will include novels with this type young romance in order to normalize it and promote more equality. (3) It is a popular opinion that in normalizing this type of relationship between homosexual individuals, there will be a positive impact on today's youth. (1)'''

People will make of it what they will and I can’t let that sway the things I believe and the things I write about." Telgermeier continues to say "If a chaste heterosexual kiss had happened in Drama, no one would have batted an eye", meaning to discuss the double standard of the objections to this novel. (1) This idea is consistent with other sources and praises for Drama such as THE GAZETTE and Brownstein, that fully support the normalization of homosexual relationships, and also support her deliverance in the form of a graphic novel for this subjectively more mature theme.

Final Word Count to changes: 368 ***I was having trouble finding more than five scholarly sources, so we decided that the amount I currently have is fine.***

References for the above changes

Alverson, B. (2017). Just another day in an LGBTQ comic. School Library Journal, 63(05), 38. Retrieved from   http://proxy.library.georgetown.edu/login?url=https://search.proquest.com/docview/1894681499?accountid=11091

For this source I found something that could be added to the controversy point of the page. This source talks about how drama normalizes the LGBTQ community and is a good addition in a positive viewpoint for why schools would promote the book.

Cavna, M. (2015). 'Persepolis,' 'saga' and 'drama' among 'most challenged' books in U.S. libraries. Retrieved from http://proxy.library.georgetown.edu/login?url=https://search.proquest.com/docview/1673055948?accountid=11091

As drama came under fire and became one of the Most Challenged books she spoke out and stood behind her novel. This includes a quote from Telgemeier on what she wanted a quote to accomplish.

Cavna, M. (2018). Rock-star YA author raina telgemeier will publish the graphic memoir ‘Guts’ next fall. Retrieved from http://proxy.library.georgetown.edu/login?url=https://search.proquest.com/docview/2117294167?accountid=11091

This could be added to books that Telgemeier has written, I think that section needs to be updated as well.

'Ghosts' takes on A tough topic for children. (2016). Weekend edition sunday Retrieved from http://link.galegroup.com/apps/doc/A463246449/LitRC?u=wash43584&sid=LitRC&xid=ba9462f0

This is an interview with Telgemeier. She touches on why she wrote on the sensitive topics she does. We also get some background into her life as well. This would be good in the analysis and maybe in the controversy section as well.

Goedhart, B. (2013, ). The drama of middle school. The Gazette Retrieved from http://proxy.library.georgetown.edu/login?url=https://search.proquest.com/docview/1318990350?accountid=11091

This source does a good job and both summarizing the novel and discussing the contrast between the graphic novel style and the controversially mature content. This could be a good addition to the analysis and controversy section.