User:Laurenen2004/Wendell Smith (sportswriter)/Akgreg25 Peer Review

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 * Wendell Smith (sportswriter):

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"Smith is survived by his family now; all the boys and men named John, inspired by Smith himself. His family is located in Kansas City."

- This sentence seems irrelevant to the WGN part that it is under.

The introductory line to the entire article can be rewritten for clarity.

- "choice of Jackie Robinson's career as the first African American Major League Baseball player" is a bit unclear. You could say that he was influential in the creation of Jackie Robinson's career instead, or something to clarify.

Under Life and Career ""wished that he could sign him,"" is in quotes, but there is no source attached to it.