User:Laurenmacky/Sphalerite/EmlyCole Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Laurenmacky


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Laurenmacky/Sphalerite
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sphalerite

Lead
The drafted changes are all very good. The lead has been rewritten to include new information that reflects what has been added to the article, as well as simplifies and adds to the information that was there. The leads introductory sentence concisely describes Sphalerite and the following sentences describe the general overview of the article, however, does not mention the major sections to follow in this article. Your new lead is concise and well written. All information found within it is present within the article.

Content and Clarity
The content of your additions is good. All the new sections are all relevant to the topic, and gives the information in a concise and easily understandable way. Your section to the article added 'Varieties' is written very well for clarity with how the terminology used such as "cleiophane" was defined which made the section much more understandable. There was also no spelling mistakes found which also increased the clarity of your draft. All content you have added belongs in the article and is very relevant to the topic of sphalerite.

Tone and Balance
All the points that are added are all equally represented, and are all a fairly equal length giving no more more coverage to one point than another. The content you have added is factual and scientific such as the optical properties of sphalerite. As there points in general are undisputed as they are the tested properties of the mineral, the information you have added is neutral and unbiased.

Sources and References
In the content that has been added, all have claims backed up by a large amount of sources that match the information cited. The content added in your draft is from sources that are mostly up to date, although a few articals from the references are fairly old and may be outdated information (from 1970s, 80's). Any links checked of these worked fine. These sources are all reliable, coming from things such as journals and well known organizations websites.

In the talk page of sphalerite, there is discussion of adding chemical properties such as the melting point, which you have done in your draft.

Organization
All the information you have added to your draft is sectioned into categories which are easy to navigate and read, where the information all reflect the heading or the section.

Suggestions
I think your draft is really good, if there were any suggestions on changes, it would just be to look to see if the older articals cited have a newer source and if information has changed since the original. One other suggestion that may be worth looking into is adding more context to your 'uses' section under "other" to provide the ways in which sphalerite is used for these materials.