User:Laveah/International Rights Advocates v. Apple, Microsoft, Dell, Tesla/Sidharth S Mahadeo Peer Review

General info
Laveah
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Laveah/International Rights Advocates v. Apple, Microsoft, Dell, Tesla - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):User:Laveah/International Rights Advocates v. Apple, Microsoft, Dell, Tesla - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
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The author provides an overview of the natural resources that the DRC provides and talks about the human rights violations used to extract these materials. The information is additive but it isn't backed up by sources. The article needs sources especially when detailing the human rights violations in extraction and statistics. This article details some pretty horrific violations by big corporations so it's important to use words that can get that across without being interpreting your own opinions. I don't think you've done that so far but it's something to be careful of for future language.

Its also important to consider how this will fit into the already published article. Will this have its own subheading? Personally I think it should be its own subheading under something like "labor violations in DRC".

As for neutrality, in this case presenting honest research that is well supported is necessary. The opposing argument is objectively wrong if there is valid evidence showing labor violations and low development despite big corporations feeding off the DRC's resources. So neutrality wouldn't need to be a big focus however this can easily divulge into an argumentative article so you should be very careful moving forward that the information is at the forefront of the article.