User:LavenderCloud/Self-diagnosis/Mevanko Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Self-Diagnosis


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:RhetoricH&W2022/Self-diagnosis?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Self-diagnosis

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Removed quote from lead section -- took out distracting, bulky, unnecessary, and bias information
 * Add inclusivity based on demographics to the lead section, modernized description
 * Added factors that influence self-diagnosis -- marketing influences gives more detail by incorporating social media and modern factors
 * Added quotes from social media for examples: twitter “‘i have self-diagnosed autism-’ NO YOU DONT,”
 * Added lots of hyperlinks connecting to other Wikipedia pages to create more travel from page to page
 * Added lots of statistics and data to support what they are saying
 * Overall: substantial changes that make this wiki page more useful and filled with information that is relevant to the present day and reflects current trends