User:Layladye/Psychosis/JulesUAB Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Layladye


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Layladye/Psychosis?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Psychosis

Evaluate the drafted changes
The original page offers an extensive amount of information, however, I believe the organization of the page could be reorganized. I believe that reorganizing the sections to begin with the history could be best to introduce psychosis. Overall, the content of the original page seems well written and extensive. The drafted contribution itself is a little confusing, I would suggest to bold or underline text that you have edited, rather than bold the text that was transferred from the original page. I believe these sentences are the drafted contribution "The symptoms of psychosis may be caused by serious psychiatric disorders such as schizophrenia, schizoaffective disorder, a number of medical illnesses, and trauma. Psychosis may also be temporary or transient, and be caused by medications or substance use disorder (substance-induced psychosis)," which has some confusing language. Transient and temporary both indicate a short time frame; I would suggest to describe the varying degrees of time that psychosis could span - less than a month or more than six months. To continue drafting, you could also add demographics: sex, ethnicity, age, etc.. It also looks like the research section is under developed, so that can be another possible contribution. Keep up the editing, you're doing great!