User:Layladye/Psychosis/Kvhurley28 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Layladye


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Layladye/Psychosis?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Psychosis

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think Psychosis is a very interesting topic and I was very interested to read your article. I like how you studied psychosis within adolescents and I thought your tone was honest and effective. In regards to the section on psychosis within adolescents, I think you could include a few more citations that link the information you presented to the original sources. I also think it would be effective if you included real-life accounts of people who have experience psychosis. Using statistics or real-life events would be a primary source. Overall, the information you presented is important and reliable, but it could use a few more primary sources to increase the overall validity. I would be interested to see what else you decide to research about psychosis.