User:LazerRocDoc/Lithium/Tnmanning Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

LazerRocDoc


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:LazerRocDoc/Lithium?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * User:LazerRocDoc/Lithium
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lithium

Evaluate the drafted changes
The draft provides a new segment to the lithium article. The section gives details on different alternative methods for extracting lithium. The leading paragraph provides a clear and concise description of the article's topic. The lead paragraph has been updated to suit the new content added by my peer, it describes lithium in the ocean water which links with the draft changes. The clarity of the draft is clear and concise, it is very easy to understand the concept and flows well. It is easy to understand the topics that are being written about.

The draft is well structured, it contains logical flow and appropriate headings. It's organized in alphabetical order, it contains a clear introduction to different extraction methods. Overall the paragraphs are well organized and not too wordy and big, it allows the reader to not be flooded with too much information in one area. The draft is neutral throughout the paragraphs, it provides a neutral point of view for the readers on lithium and the different extraction methods. The draft is well-balanced, and the veiwpoints are not overrepresented with no claims that appear heavily biased towards a particular position.

Overall, the draft is lacking sources, in all three paragraphs there are only 2 sources. However, they are working reliable sources that reflect the topic written. The sources are written by multiple authors eliminating bias which could appear due to the limited sources used. Here's another source that can be added to create another subtopic in your draft:

Source: Sun, Y., Wang, Q., Wang, Y., Yun, R., & Xiang, X. (2021). Recent advances in magnesium/lithium separation and lithium extraction technologies from salt lake brine. Separation and Purification Technology, 256, 117807–. https://doi.org/10.1016/j.seppur.2020.117807.

this article talks about lithium extraction from salt lake brine. which can be implemented into your draft as another extraction method. Overall, your draft had many great qualities but there is room for improvement. Adding multiple sources is a great way to remove bias from a standpoint and add neutrality. The structure of the draft is well done but maybe bolding the subtitles will help guide the readers to the different sub-sections. The draft is grammatically correct, but there are little to no grammar issues.