User:Lbe20/Obstetrical nursing/Sadie.Eggleston Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lbe20


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Lbe20/Obstetrical nursing


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Obstetrical nursing

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

'''I think that you wrote your draft in a style that fits well according to the Wikipedia genre. It is easily understandable for readers and the general audience. Additionally, it provides a notable overview of the topic. I think that the sections/dividers that you are contributing to this article will really aid in organizing the information. One thing that I suggest would be to add a few wikilinks to the article, as this may further develop the article and add to the overall Wikipedia style. Something that is crucial that needs to be added is citations after sentences or information that you added. I saw in your bibliography that you have reliable sources, but I think it would be beneficial if you would cite throughout the article, so that it is not plagiarized and will not get flagged in the future. Additionally, a grammatical thing that could possibly be changed, include in the section discussing job description, would be the word "preform" could be changed to perform. The sentence structure in the first sentence of the “Education” section could be changed to improve clarity by switching around the wording and stating that “Ob nurses typically start as registered nurses.” In the last sentence of this paragraph, I would change “all most” to "almost". Lastly, another suggestion that I have would be to change the "Data" section to "Demographics", since you are mostly discussing statistical data related to a population. Overall, I think that your additions are going to improve the article significantly and will contribute to its reliability.'''