User:Lcastillo4/Discrimination of Immigrants in the NBA/Msicker Peer Review

General info
Lcastillo4
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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):
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Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer? It is a new article so the lead was not updated. The lead does reflect the new content.
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic? The lead sentence does not address the topic being addressed in the article but rather a more general overarching topic.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections? The lead does not have a brief description of the articles major sections.
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article? The lead does include information not present in the article, one example being the mentioning of Hank Biasatti which is not later mentioned in the article.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed? The lead is concise.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic? The content is relevant to the topic at hand.
 * Is the content added up-to-date? It is all very up-to-date considering it is referring to some players who are still active within the league.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong? From what I can tell there is nothing glaring that is missing, nor is there anything that seems strange or out of place.
 * Does the article deal with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps? Does it address topics related to historically underrepresented populations or topics? The article definitely does address an underrepresented population, that being foreign NBA players.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral? The content added does seem neutral and doesn't make any value claims regarding any specific topics leaving it pretty objective.
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? No.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented? It doesn't seem that any viewpoints are over or underrepresented.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another? No, the content does not allude to any positions or opinions, but rather restates facts or statements from the sources.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information? Most of the sources utilized are news outlets however with this topic I am unsure if you would be able to find any sources that are more academic or peer-reviewed, so compared to all the available resources I would say the sources used are reliable. I would recommend spending more time looking for peer-reviewed journals or books on the topic however just to find a couple sources that are more reliable than the ones currently being used.
 * Does the content accurately reflect what the cited sources say? (You'll need to refer to the sources to check this.) For the most part yes. The only instance in which I noticed a claim that was not supported by the source was the sentence in the lead "Along with Major League Baseball, the NBA has the highest proportion of foreign-born players ever recorded" which is a fact I couldn't find in the source cited at the end of the sentence.
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic? The sources from what I can tell do reflect the literature on the topic, however perhaps with some deeper research one would be able to find more books or academic sources on the topic.
 * Are the sources current? The sources are current considering they are mostly from modern news outlets.
 * Are the sources written by a diverse spectrum of authors? Do they include historically marginalized individuals where possible? The list of sources does utilize a broad range of individuals from different ethnic backgrounds, however I didn't see if any of the authors were women, so if possible I would recommend trying to find some sources written by women.
 * Are there better sources available, such as peer-reviewed articles in place of news coverage or random websites? (You may need to do some digging to answer this.) From what I can tell there aren't any better sources available on the subject that the author hasn't already utilized, but I did not fully utilize the research tools and databases, so perhaps through those tools the author would be able to find more sources.
 * Check a few links. Do they work? The links do work.

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read? The content written is concise and clear.
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors? There are one or two spelling errors throughout the article.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic? The content is well organized and partitioned in a logical way.

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic? No images.
 * Are images well-captioned? Still no images.
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations? Not yet any images.
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way? Unfortunately still no images.

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject? The article does meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements.
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject? There is a fairly exhaustive list of sources used.
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles? The article's pattern and structure is reflective of other articles regarding similar topics.
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable? Yes.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete? The article is new so it hasn't been "improved" but the content added is all very good and well organized.
 * What are the strengths of the content added? All the content is objective and fact based, as it is based on recent history and statistics from the NBA.
 * How can the content added be improved? Just ironing out some of the spelling errors and ensuring that all information from the sources is being accurately reflected in the writing. Additionally searching for more academic and peer reviewed sources, perhaps some written by women would aid in the reliability of the information being presented.