User:Lcortez26/Child bereavement/Miafclark Peer Review

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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Lcortez26/Child bereavement:Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) Child bereavement

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Lead: Lead is perfect and captures the content!

Content: I think there is a gramatical mistake in the first sentence. It seems too much of a run on sentence. Also I am not sure if it is appropriate to introduce the psychologists by name in wikipedia. I would double check this, it could be totally fine, i just have never seen it before! The phases of childrens understanding of death is very clear and understandable. Same thing with the manifestations of gried in children. I would add more in text citations so readers can see where the information comes from. Overall, I think this information is very important to include.

Sources and references: Like I said above, I think the crying and preoccupation and idealization with the deceased needs more in text citations. Same thing with phase 2 of childrens conceptions of death. You also have the same source listed as 2 and 3. Same thing for 1,4,5 and 6. I think if you could find a meta-analysis looking at how children display grief it could be very helpful to your work. Two books do not seem to be enough references. When I googled your topic this source came up: https://www.tandfonline.com/doi/full/10.1080/07481180903492422 --> maybe you could check it out and add it to your sources! I also found this one that talks about the differences between sex and how they express grief https://www.sciencedirect.com/science/article/pii/S0140197118300575

Images: No images however I think this is best

Organization: content is clear and well organized. Like I mentioned above I would double check your opening sentence of the first topic because it is a little difficult to read.

Great job, this is really important information that needs to be included. I would just add more sources and citations so your work doesn't get taken down.