User:Ldonahue3254/Biodiversity hotspot/Acryan1 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Ldonahue3254


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ldonahue3254/Biodiversity_hotspot?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Biodiversity hotspot

Evaluate the drafted changes
Most of the detail added is to the lead, making it the bulk of the information in the article. The information added could constitute a separate section, but the nature of the article is unique- in that there are few other sections with a bulk of written information, it might make more sense for the additions to remain in the lead.

Sources are up to date, within 10 years- give or take. The edits mention the activity of native groups in the area of major biodiversity hotspots, which feels to be the extent of possible address of diversity and equity gaps.

All edited claims are empirically backed up, and neutral in tone and direction. The edits suggest a certain objective truth of the disappearance of biodiversity hotspots, which might be construed as biased towards conservation, but in actuality is just factual.

The edits are backed up, and organized well.

No visual media included.

Suggestions for future edits

The OCBILs labels could be explained further and their criteria included, and this distinction could constitute a new section with the opportunity for more substantial edits. It may also be worth including information about species in biodiversity hotspots and species loss, though this might not be information necessary in the biodiversity hotspot article. It merits mentioning, and could include a hyperlink to the articles that more closely constitute this information.

additional resource;

Robert, Katleen, Jones, Daniel O.B., Tyler, Paul A., Van Rooij, David, Huvenne, Veerle A.I. 2014. Finding the hotspots within a biodiversity hotspot: fine-scale biological predictions within a submarine canyon using high-resolution acoustic mapping techniques, Marine Ecology.https://doi.org/10.1111/maec.12228