User:Leahyaa/Slendertail lanternshark/Gracegjerde Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Dayna Freeman


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Leahyaa/Slendertail_lanternshark?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * (Sandbox)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Slendertail lanternshark

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall Impression:

Increased the quality of the article and made it more complete by adding a thorough explanation of the hormonal control of the slendertail lanternshark's bioluminescence

Strengths:

Added 4 peer-reviewed references, which contributes to quality and reliability of page

Very thorough explanation of hormonal control on the organism's bioluminescence, also the links to the scientific terminology is helpful...also used relatively recent articles and the information of the mechanism was complete given the current literature

Improvements:

You could add a subsection "hormonal control" to the bioluminescence section to organize the section better. Having one large block of text can sometimes hinder people from reading the whole section. If you identify key aspects of the bioluminescence with section headers, I think that readers would be able to easily find the information they are looking for