User:Leanna321/Rumination (psychology)/Sarahamc0714 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Leanna321


 * Link to draft you're reviewing User:Leanna321/Rumination (psychology)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Rumination (psychology)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, great work on this article draft so far! You have organized it well and have some great information that helps increase the understanding of what "rumination" is. I love the inclusion of a "treatment" section as it allows "rumination" to be seen as something that can be mediated. Thus, the addition of this section more wholesomely captures the subject. One suggestion that I can make is to ensure you are not trying to argue for rumination (i.e., that your sentences do not sound biased). While the information from the research studies is needed and valuable, the language used in describing these sounds as though it is biased toward rumination rather than an informative article. The one section that really sounded bias to me is the "pathology" one. I would consider keeping the research information in there but rewording it so that it sounds more neutral. Overall, there is great information here that just needs some rewording to sound less bias. Additionally, there are several places within the "Worry" section that have in-text citations rather than Wikipedia citations. I am unsure if this is something in the original article or if you did this for your personal thought processes. If you intend to use these cites, I would be sure to edit the references to ensure they are embedded within Wikipedia rather than cited APA style within the paragraph. Also, I would make sure when you are formatting and making new sections to ensure you are using the "Header" function on Wikipedia rather than the "sub-header" one or bolding the term. Lastly, I think you could consider including a section that discusses the "signs" of rumination to more completely develop the article. I think the addition of this could help explain what rumination is in more depth. In general, it is obvious you have put some hard work into this so far. I think you are well on your way to creating a great final article.