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Action of September 1565 encompasses a series of events involving the Spanish launching an attack upon French Huguenot-settled Fort Caroline on the 4 of September in 1565, until the 12 of October in 1565.

French explorer Jean Ribault had recently returned from England to acquire supplies for the settlement known as Fort Caroline.

Background: First Two Expeditions
In February 1562, Gaspard de Coligny commissioned two ships to sail from Le Havre to the cape of Florida, and then sail north, in order to find a safe haven for French Protestants. The expedition was led by Jean Ribault and René de Laudonnière with three ships and 150 members that were mainly Norman. By May 1, they had reached present day St. John's River (which was named Rivière de Mai, and by the 17th of the same month, the expedition made landfall at Port Royal Sound (which was also named by the crew) and erected Charlesfort. A volunteer of 26 troops stationed under Captain Albert de la Pierria volunteered to stay at Charlesfort while the remaining crew sailed back towards France. The crew had failed to return due to civil war erupting in France, and that Ribault had been arrested after reneging on an agreement with Queen Elizabeth on funding an expedition towards capturing Florida for England. As a result, the garrison stationed had resorted to inner skirmishes, murder (including de la Pierria), and defection to Natives. A crude boat built by the remaining members led by Barrè set sail for England in late 1562, and had taken part in cannibalism before eventually found by an English ship. Some were able to return to France. Charlesfort was later destroyed by Spanish lead forces, and captured the only Frenchman remaining with the natives.

The Peace of Amboise in 1563 placed Coligny back in power, and while Ribault was in prison, he appointed his second-in-command Laudonnière to establish a new settlement for the Huguenots, and the expedition left Le Havre by April of 1564. By late June of 1564, Laudonnière and his expedition of 300 colonists in three ships to the southern bank of St. John's River, and establishes Fort Caroline. A cordial rapport had developed among the French settlers and the natives.

Nausicaä of the Valley of the Wind (manga) GA Review
Lead

Covers all notable topics in a broad manner.

Setting Nothing wrong with it otherwise. In comparison to other manga articles that are GA that I've read, the setting (or plot) all appear to not need citations.
 * Remove the comma after future in the first sentence.

Plot You could probably start rearranging from here: '''She is recovered by her companions, people she met after leaving the Valley and who have joined her on her quest for a peaceful coexistence. The fact that the mold can be manipulated and used as a weapon disturbs Nausicaä. Her treks into the forest have already taught her that the Sea of Corruption is actually purifying the polluted land. The Forest People, humans who have learned to live in harmony with the Sea of Corruption, confirm this is the purpose of the Sea of Corruption and show Nausicaä a vision of the restored Earth at the center of the forest.''
 * Selm was the only one of the Forest People to tell Nausicaä of the purpose of the Sea of Corruption, and it was during her deep sleep after being absorbed by the Ohmu. However, the presentation without mentioning the names of the supporting characters is better suited for the article; so if its possible, could it be reworded w/o mentioning Selm by name (e.g. One of the Forest People confirmed to Nausicaä the purpose of the Sea of Corruption or Nausicaä's recieved affirmation of the Sea of Corruption's purpose by one of the Forest People after being assisted and rescued them).

Development

Precursors and Early Development
 * Add 'while' in front of working and a comma after 'Cinema'.
 * Get rid of the comma after 'Two projects were proposed to Tokuma Shoten'.
 * Not sure if 'to be' is necessary.
 * Initially rejected? Were the two projects ever accepted? If the two projects were never accepted, initially is unnecessary. Clarification, please.
 * Read the manga section for more information on corrections.

Influences
 * 'Nakao's influence on his work has been noted by Shiro Yoshioka'. Other people have their influences mentioned in some amount of detail. If his cannot be noted, it might not be necessary.
 * The last sentence involving Kentaro Takekuma may need to be separated, or at the very least have 'created in Watercolour and printed in colour' removed. It doesn't seem relevant.

Creation
 * 'Frederik L. Schodt observed that Nausicaä is different from other Japanese manga' should probably start off with Frederik L. Schodt observed differences between Nausicaä and other Japanese manga or something akin to it.
 * According to Takekuma section probably could be combined. Something like According to Takekuma, because of Miyazaki's use of pencil without inking for much of the series, the options in line variation is not available seems better.

Media

Manga The information regarding the publication of the last chapter has been repeated (first instance in Precursors and Early Development). Considering the lack of citations for the first instance, and the relevance better suited for this section, I think that it can be deleted from the 'Precursors'. Moving the information from 'The final panel is dated January 28, 1994' to the end of the paragraph into this section is more appropriate, too.

Other
 * The use of 'initially rejected' again.

Reception
 * The first two sentence needs to be combined as one.
 * Jason Thompson may need information on his occupation or mention something akin to in an article in House of 1000 Manga/Anime News Network'', since everyone else in the section has either their occupation, or the book, article, etc. being referenced in the sentences.
 * The first sentence of the last paragraph needs to be separated into multiple sentences. The length makes it an uneasy read.

Citations
 * Miyazaki citation dated to October, 10, 1982 appears to not be linked to a specific page, but to the main page of the Animage page. Please fix.

Sources
 * The two Scott Ryan sources have Harvard referencing errors. If you need to see it, here's this script. Click and follow instructions, ask if you need any help with it.
 * It appears that none of the Stonebridge page links are working as of now, but that's due to renovations. If you can find links to the books elsewhere in the meantime, that would be great I suppose I shouldn't be too nit-picky in this matter, I suppose...
 * The Animage links all are to the main page of the website. Is it possible to have direct links?


 * Overall
 * Well-written?
 * Prose quality:
 * Manual of Style compliance:

It would be fine if aforementioned errors were fixed; it's rather close.


 * Verifiable?
 * Reference layout:
 * Reliable sources: Animage links need to be fixed
 * No original research: None dectected


 * Broad in coverage?
 * Major aspects: Very detailed in coverage
 * Focused: Close


 * Neutral?:


 * Stable?:


 * Illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * Appropriate licensing: Looks good
 * Relevance and captioning: Possibly could benefit from one of the cover of the artbooks, or other releases of the books in other countries, though more than two images seems a bit much for this article.

Nothing major, the prose and citation links are what holding this article back. Feel free to ask for second or third opinions. I'll attempt to add that information onto the article assuming everything is fixed. LeftAire (talk) 00:11, 3 March 2015 (UTC)
 * Pass or Fail?:.

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