User:Lefty89/Ellen Cassedy/Junipurr2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Lefty89 and Avilolx


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lefty89/Ellen_Cassedy?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * NA

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: There doesn't seem to be a lead that quickly introduces what's in the article. An introductory sentence would be helpful to introduce the article's topic and the major sections. Make sure that it is concise when you do add the intro sentence.

Content: The content looks like it is up to date, and relevant. It also seems to deal with Wikipedia’s content gaps about jewish culture.

Tone & Balance: There does seem to be a bit of biased wording in the article. Make sure to stay neural when providing information.

Sources & References: The article itself isn't sourced. It does have references, but you can't tell what information was provided from which source. Might be helpful to also see if there are any other Wikipedia article that could be linked to this article, like the 9to5 article.

Organization: The flow of the article is easy to read and comprehend. It is well written, and there doesn't seem to be any grammatical errors.

Images: There is no images added, so that could be helpful to add to the article if there are any available.

Since it's a New Article: There are only 3 sources, and they all focus on Ellen Cassedy, which the article is about. Might be good to add some more sources that are independent of the subject if any are available. The sections should be separated by headings instead of just paragraphs, so that it looks like other Wikipedia articles.

Overall impressions: The article is easy to comprehend and seems to address the important information about Ellen Cassedy. There may be slight biased words used, and the article needs citing of the resources, so that it isn't plagiarized. Overall though, it looks like it will be a good new article on Wikipedia.