User:Leil4hhh/Vanity sizing/Glo.rriaa Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Leila

Evaluate the drafted changes
Peer Review

Lead

The lead has additional information that enriches the article.They made their presence noticeable by including an introduction and describing the argument. They also do a great job of referencing Wikipedia's information on clothe’s sizes affecting consumers and additional data she gathered from outside sources. The lead’s addition to the article is concise, but feels argumentative.

Content

The added content is relevant to the article’s topic and very informative. However, the added content is older than five years. Some information I believe would make the article more informative is information on plus size clothes and how plus size women feel about the material being used for their clothes and the price. The lead may also want to include how this topic relates to underrepresented populations.

Tone and balance

The connection the lead writes is fairly neutral, but the tone feels argumentative. This may be because the lead acknowledges that the majority of consumers being affected by the sizing of clothes is majority female. There is also an overrepresentation on the sizing differently shaped women choose to wear. The reason for this is because most stores sell plus size clothes. Additionally, some of the lead’s information may be outdated and has a persuasive tone towards women’s vanity.

Sources and References

The content used for this article is reliable, but slightly outdated. The sources are thorough, and are diverse. Moreover, it is understandable why most of those sources are not as relevant due to the topic being assigned. Most of these sources take place from 2012 to 2017. During this era, most plus sized women were not able to find clothes that fit them properly without being shamed for their body type. Although women may still struggle with finding clothes that may fit them perfectly, it is less likely that a mall will not have a plus size section.

Organization

The content is well written without any grammatical or spelling errors. The content is also very organized with major points and broken down sections.

Images and media

The lead did not include any images.

Overall impressions

The content did improve the overall quality of the article and added some information the public may have not been aware of. Some strengths the content provided with is how women’s vanity has been affected by retail’s selection of clothing. However, the content that may need improvement is including that plus sized women now have a place to shop. The additions the lead included onto the article are great and well written. The lead did what they could with the available information there is about how capitalism affects women’s mental health.